My birth certificate reads
"OSIRUS the woarst curse on this earth"-

My death certficicate will read
"beware my rebirth".

You aint sick your got no depth of being ill-
your brainless!We could have sent…escabating teams to HEMOTEP to unearth your skill.
But your prophecy of m.c. is like one sided sex it’s….ending half forfilled.
Every thing happens in 2…. if that’s right?
Me murdering you is dejavu or a prelude to your next life.
I think bright cause once I Son rappers they'll see the light-
But if you type ass backwards punch line battles will turn to fist fights.
What’s an OMEN? Centz is to swole-cold enough to titanic split you through your SOUTHPOLE.
That’s why I roll~with KING OF THIEVES we leave every jaw STOLE.
This is just simple text-for complex threats-there’s no telling what I’d do.
Probably rape your tape on cd…dawg im just fucking with you.
Nigguz who doubt. walk away with a broke mouth.
For even questioning my realness.
I promote aids cause there is no cure for my illness.
This is addressed to the cock jocks….. here’s a dick to ride-
See CENTZ got your soul OPEN and LIFES A BITCH I leave cock~eyed.
MOTHER NATURES a whore given me head so I BLOW WORLDWIDE-
And it’s a trip with these kids on my tip this my second time-being circumsized
Love or hate WORD~P but if you aint got overies.
I prefer you don’t confuse me…. with your sexual prefency.
Nigguz that suck like you just emencely, reveal their sexual tendency.
My flow triple my density-till im 3/4 ‘s h20 like the earths ratio land to sea.
Now ask me. Do I need to spit rhymes or do the rhymes need for me to add the spit?
The answer got to be both bitch my flow fluid is the ink the wrote the script.
The script turned to a ship. So if I fail-
That means the day my words float to minds the boat would of set sail.
Fight battles with words and impail-the frail-
An teaspoon of flow for a POUND of POUNDS… my monohydrate DAPS the scale

That was sick! I like the wordplay. Not one of your better pieces but it was still ill and you show your extensive vocab. Keep it up.

damn.... originality, wordplay and metaphors were off the hizzle.... only problem was flow.... multi's.... structure.... fix those and dude you'll dope and locked.... i liked this.... thanks for the drop.... hope you improve.... cause you've got a dope potential.... JUST TAKE THE ADVICE I'm GIVING YOU.... you're original.... don't let anyone tell how to be original.... but where technique is concerned.... you need it.... flow, multi's, structure....

what would you change

UPPIN

IT WAS A PRETTY TIGHT SPIT I MUST SAY KEEP THE FLOWS COMMING AND HAVE ALL OTHER MCS RUNNING
ITS THE SHARKS

It seemed like you just came from history class lol
but anyways the flow was tight nice vocab formation as a whole

holla

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thnk you

UPPIN

aight lets get crackin..

I liked this peice dawg, it was off the hook, you used some nice vocab and everything, but you need to not get off hands with your lines, try to lessin the shit. Like keep your lines smaller and consistant with eachother. It will sound better and will have a nice flow. Trust. Word, this shit was definetly a peice of art. Good job on this shit right here.

IM LOOOKING FO ANY HELP ANYONE CAN OFFER WEATHER I LIKE YOU OR NOT WE ARE HIP HOP AND RAP SO WE CAN ONLY ELIVATE ONE ANOTHER GEOLOGIST I LIKE YOUR ADVICE BUT I WOULD NEED YOUR HELP TO MAKE IT HAPPEN RIGHT.........TEACH ME!!!!

Well I do my best writing when I'm by myself. I just turn off the stereo and the TV or whatever and that's when my mind state is at it's illest. That's what I recommend for other writers. Just turn everything off and you'd be amazed at the stuff you can come up with. And it's important to be versatile.


And getting mentored by a battle veteran will help you alot also. It does for me, my mentor is an emcee/champion battler from Detroit, he's been doing the damn thing for 10 years now. I first met him over a year ago and we became real tight. And I've learned alot from him. So I would say find somebody willing to mentor you. For the sake of elevation, of course.

You are already on a higher level as far as expressing yourself in rhyme. I like reading your stuff, keep it up. One+

thnk you and i will try just that meta 5 educated me a lil but at that time i was to dumb to listen now i know better

uo