I am the heart fuck your denial i speak with my beaT~
Inject your soul wit wut i hold and wut i sow i reap thru my teeth~
i breathe with intelligence ask the Lord i fathered the ring~
my pulse ripples with the power of a scholar cause knowledge is king~
I'll beat a woman based on my gender but its not my sole place~
u need ass jump on the ave and give a ho mad disgrace~
burst your consciene's focal point in my funny tone~
i'll sting and numb your thought process like ur dome is your funny bone~
and yet i pulse with a crown's power bow to the wise~
i never act on impulse but this is a factituous cowardice lie~
picture my soul a torpeding missile invention, tearing the clouds above~
honk your nose at my ignorance but my innocence is clouded in love~
i notice your hesitation, take my hand as i cross the desert of real~
confused still? allow me to break the mist and present you a meal~
of social awareness called FedUp the company to deliver your peers~
Anthrax but this is non political so cease living in fear~
i cherish life but dont stutter this is not my sole place~
given the chance i would speak as a white man and destroy my whole race~
u miss my point the claim to inferiority held by minorities~
i implore you to examen the difinition defining majority~
i would rather be a unique Jaqeem then a common joe~
rather tap the full ass of a black queen then a common hoe~
but forgive me for misleading u this is not my sole place~
watch the path for pitfalls so u may see where my soul lays~
hate is bred in my inner core i live everytime a new newspaper is pressed~
i hang my head in shame every time a Hue hater is put to rest~
forgive me for witholding my sole place my minds on the loose fleeting apart~
never sure is how i live and yet always steady ready for beating, the heart~

1luv.

good piece...i thought you came harder in the 2nd half, the first half was good but i enjoyed the 2nd part better, good flow an wordplay though, vocab was decent..keep it up man uppen

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yo nice piece,... great vocab, flowz, just an overall decent piece. I liked the way you ended it with just the simplicity of the word 'heart'... nice piece, keep droppin, you always come out hard
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more flow than the poetic vibe is what i got from this
however some of it had me thinking of times when ive jsut wanted to go and scream my head off in teh hopes that someone will hear me

of social awareness called FedUp the company to deliver your peers~
Anthrax but this is non political so cease living in fear~

PEERS is the biggest connection i made with this
sometimes the pressues they give you are to strong and you get to the point to saying GEt the fukk away from me before i knock your ass out
right?
RIGHT!

anyways i related to this peice and it was really odd to read after just reading 15 love poems