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Old 09-23-03, 05:47 PM   #1
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Create headspins like whirlwinds from ryu
Cut size you from a thrust high sonicboom
Spit toxic waste, polluting societies minds
Destruct science eyes, so I can hide in the devils vision
Im the shadow in the dark, monkey wrench in the system
Im the torch in the sun, needle in between all wisdom
Pin point intelligence, a knife in the nerd
Ride on the verse with high twist turns
My thoughts are endless, infinate sentences
Decibel ear ringing mystik spitting existence
A breath of life, I inhale it with all death
I take off your flesh and leave you in the middle of location F
You cant compete with my acrobatic feats
My rapping techniques leave houdini locked in speech
Verbal teargas seperating the diffusion
of your useless, whack uncreative music
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Old 09-24-03, 07:48 AM   #2
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uppin dis piece
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Old 09-24-03, 08:29 AM   #3
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A breath of life, I inhale it with all death
My rapping techniques leave houdini locked in speech

^ second line quoted made me laugh and first was a punch

nice stuff
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Old 09-24-03, 08:52 AM   #4
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always you show potential but never feed enough lines to satisfy the ear im mad at that this was good but i wanted more....
peep my new ish called DEDICATED TO YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Old 09-24-03, 09:02 AM   #5
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agree^
but was a good read
rhyme scheme ewas decent....flowed well
some funny stuff...liked the way u wrote it

'Im the shadow in the dark, monkey wrench in the system
Im the torch in the sun, needle in between all wisdom
^stood out...

good shit
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Old 09-24-03, 10:23 AM   #6
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thanx lol, ill reply to ya piece werd-perfekt
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Old 09-26-03, 11:38 AM   #7
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uppin this peice
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Old 09-26-03, 11:42 AM   #8
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dip u some metaphors aaaaaaaaaaaaaiiiiiiiiiiiii
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Old 09-26-03, 11:57 AM   #9
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good rhyme scheme and dope flow, i agree it was not long enough but it was still a very good piece, lack of multis was made up for by wordplay and just funny shit... good drop dunnie
if ya get a chance holla at my piece shadows
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Old 09-26-03, 01:30 PM   #10
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This was a good peice, it was a good read i thought could have been longer, your flow was good, you had good wordplay also, could have used somemore multies but overall it was a good peice, keep dropping.
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Old 09-29-03, 08:13 AM   #11
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