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09-23-03, 05:47 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Bored | Short | Shit
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Create headspins like whirlwinds from ryu
Cut size you from a thrust high sonicboom Spit toxic waste, polluting societies minds Destruct science eyes, so I can hide in the devils vision Im the shadow in the dark, monkey wrench in the system Im the torch in the sun, needle in between all wisdom Pin point intelligence, a knife in the nerd Ride on the verse with high twist turns My thoughts are endless, infinate sentences Decibel ear ringing mystik spitting existence A breath of life, I inhale it with all death I take off your flesh and leave you in the middle of location F You cant compete with my acrobatic feats My rapping techniques leave houdini locked in speech Verbal teargas seperating the diffusion of your useless, whack uncreative music |
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09-24-03, 07:48 AM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: CC07 EC19
uppin dis piece
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09-24-03, 08:29 AM | #3 | |||||||
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Re: Bored | Short | Shit
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^ second line quoted made me laugh and first was a punch nice stuff |
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09-24-03, 08:52 AM | #4 | ||||||
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always you show potential but never feed enough lines to satisfy the ear im mad at that this was good but i wanted more....
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09-24-03, 09:02 AM | #5 | ||||||
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agree^
but was a good read rhyme scheme ewas decent....flowed well some funny stuff...liked the way u wrote it 'Im the shadow in the dark, monkey wrench in the system Im the torch in the sun, needle in between all wisdom ^stood out... good shit |
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09-24-03, 10:23 AM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: CC07 EC19
thanx lol, ill reply to ya piece werd-perfekt
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09-26-03, 11:38 AM | #7 | ||||||
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uppin this peice
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09-26-03, 11:42 AM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: 2B63 E9DE
dip u some metaphors aaaaaaaaaaaaaiiiiiiiiiiiii
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09-26-03, 11:57 AM | #9 | ||||||
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good rhyme scheme and dope flow, i agree it was not long enough but it was still a very good piece, lack of multis was made up for by wordplay and just funny shit... good drop dunnie
if ya get a chance holla at my piece shadows |
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09-26-03, 01:30 PM | #10 | ||||
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This was a good peice, it was a good read i thought could have been longer, your flow was good, you had good wordplay also, could have used somemore multies but overall it was a good peice, keep dropping.
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09-29-03, 08:13 AM | #11 | ||||||
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upping this peice
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