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09-26-03, 06:24 AM | #1 | ||||||
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insignificant infinite repents on syndicate, intricate lyrics-get, spit wit spirit-quick//
i aint fearin-shit, my ears aint hearin-shit, so its clear im still gearin-shit// shiftin-shapes and liftin-crates then throwin them bitches at tha slickest-face// knockin down pretty-boys, dont dare to fuck wit us city-boys, cause we might release them gritty-toys// shells dispell from tha chamber of hell, releasin my danger when im angered by bells[sharp ringin annoys me]// you fell but still i reel in tha fish, serve my bitch split on this dish// damn i wish, poverty wouldnt bother-me, i swallow-weed while hoes follow-me// i aint a pimp, and i aint no busta, fuck-a sucka when they talk shit i bust-a// cap when im strapped w/ blindin clustas, spray ya whole area then finish wit my dusta// lusts a sin thats always comitted, i permitted this dimwitted slut to fuck so she been-splitted// i dont rely on proper-grammar, ill prop-the-hammer in side ya skull damn-it. |
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09-26-03, 06:58 AM | #2 | ||||
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I liked this piece...the multi'z and flow were good...althoough it seemz as if some multi'z were a lil' forced...but they would still sound good in audio...there wasn't really a story behind the rhyme...you was just basically spittin' whatever...but it's all good...sometimez I do that too...but for future reference...try to think of a concept that you wanna stick to before you rhyme and it will help you elevate a lot...like for example...you see all of my open mics...they are all keystylez...but it doezn't really look like it cause I picked a topic and stayed with it...but this was a nice drop for just a bragging rights type rhyme...
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09-26-03, 02:59 PM | #3 | ||||||
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thanks for the replies on this short piece. its not topical but if you wanna read something topical then read these posts.~1~
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=78249 http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=80757 uppin^^^ |
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09-26-03, 06:46 PM | #4 | ||||
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Yeah i liked this peice too, it was good, and it was a good read i thought, your flow was good, you had good content, your multies were good, overall id say it was a good peice, keep dropping.
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09-26-03, 11:32 PM | #5 | ||||||
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thanks still uppin
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09-27-03, 12:18 AM | #6 | |||
Fuck You, I Rhyme Better
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you hit me up a few times... least i can do
the flow was very good and the multis were good for looks thought the hyphens are annoying to look at but i get why they are there vocab was very well used if you would be so kind http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81665 |
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09-28-03, 10:48 PM | #7 | |||||||
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uppin for some more.~1~ |
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