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Old 10-03-03, 11:58 PM   #1
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My Love - Turned Into Anger

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Love = Blue
Anger = Red


Wakin up every mornin happy~
could make me angry if my 4 mounth old son slapped me~
girl always on my mind~
got me thinkin bout her in an everlastin bind~
cant subside my love for her~
couldnt divide ~ the pride of my 'dove' my angel my baby~
i be feelin happy~somebody grab me~
get me back to reality~
cuz this thug aint G~
with this girl bein my P.I.M.P~
i cant slang without this girl~
im the grass she the dirt~
the legs the skirt~goto together like we be ernie n bert//
I love you~~~ WAT AM I SAYING?




What the fuck is this bull shit~
i spit~i aint down like this~
bitch aint givin it up~
make me wnna throw up~
im sick of dis girl~
i got a disease~bitch got on her knees~
sucked me off wit ease~didnt even gotta say please~
now i got some S.T.D~bitch how could she do this to me~
i thought we was in love~now i just wnna shove~
hit~spit clips at her hip~make blood dip~and slip into her sternum~
i dun give a fuck if i goto jail~ill pray she gets hers too~
her life is for sail~me n the Coma crew~gona merk her family~wit r gas-cets u think we jew~
she be cheatin~she gon be bleedin~
sayin how she love me~she just wants my money
I FUCKING HATE U WHORE I HOPE U BURN~
what am i sayin i love u
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Old 10-04-03, 12:01 AM   #2
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LMGDMFAO! This shit was funny and ill at tha same fuckin time. I like tha end part of tha love then how u went into hate. I like this man. Tight drop
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Old 10-04-03, 12:04 AM   #3
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thanks nigga
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Old 10-04-03, 01:09 AM   #4
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Old 10-04-03, 01:27 AM   #5
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Unfortunately i have to say the hate part had way more flow...

i like this approach of yours...but could you make it more clear where the rhyming structure is... it's difficult to read the way you're typin it out... but that's just me...

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Old 10-04-03, 01:37 AM   #6
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yeah this was a pretty good piece i thought, it made a good read, it flowed pretty well through out the piece, your content was good, and your vocab was good too, overall it was a good piece, keep dropping.
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Old 10-04-03, 01:52 AM   #7
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^^^ i jus realized u say that to every1 masta hahaha

but anyways...to tell u the truth im kinda tired of that Eminem scene talkin about bitch this , bitch i hate u, bitch u gave me an STD i think thas kinda wack n yea the red flowd better the the blue (ahhhhh thas wack) blue is better then red u discraced the color blue homie haha

but it was an alright drop ~1~
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Old 10-04-03, 03:51 PM   #8
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lol fuck u... i aint down wit blue any way ;p thanks for reps
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Old 10-04-03, 04:14 PM   #9
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an okay drop, could be better tho..........

peep dis open mic

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83469
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