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checkin in....holla....................................... .....................................
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I see this kid is 2-4, so a win is against all odds/
Got ya prayin to tha devil cuz ur being dispensed by God/
Don't ever try to rip one of tha illest in tha game/
I spit my venom in ya direction and it starts to swell in ya veins/
but I give ya props for not bein a coward, watchin me while I fucked ya moms in tha shower/
and was the center of attention at ya sisters baby shower/
Goin through ya family like I had all tha power/
Cuz I'm tha type of thug that tears up tha clubs/
if I see you l got that slugs that'll knock you outta ya Lugz/
I'm known to all as a disciple, spittin ancient scriptures/
I know all, like you jackin off to male pornographic pictures/
You a lil faggot, I'm reportin ya gayness live/
askin otha dudes, "Please put your cock in my ass and just drive/
I come in tha mist of the night, turn on tha light and let you watch as I fuck your wife/
Got ya spooked? You were black b4 this battled started, now ya white/
I'll fuck you lyrically like I was servin a virgin, call me tha surgeon/
I don't fix bitches, so you die in ya own period facedown, gurglin/
Call me tha verbal boxer with my jabs that'll spin ya top like a helicopter/
think you got skillz, P.Diddy don't know you cuz u ain't Chopper/
You a real MC? so I guess you're always in tha studio/
But fact is, I heard you was tha next Coolio/(hope ya better than that)

aight thas a lil somethin...thnx for tha battle and good luck

does it always take this long to drop??????????????????????/
Holla back dogg.............................................. .

I'm smacking this bitch quick, you couldn't drop [sick shit]//
If you got fucked in the [ass] by a fag with [warts~on~his~dick]//
Thoughts~fo~ya~spit could be hard~as~a~brick//
And still be TAKEN APART like you forgot to put CEMENT~ON~THE~BITCH//
The way these bullets be dentin'~ya~skull...//
Y'head gon feel more lethal [aches] than [cerebral quakes] in ya cranium~hall//
I'm draining~all of your life force, uranium~bombs//
[Rain]~on~this~bum quicker than you with your hand~on~your~balls//
I'm one~wit~da~flow, Dark Force can't run~wit~da~pros//
The FLAME I spit make these PROSTITUTE run~wit~da~hose(hoes)//
Let you think you got STIGMA when I take the gun~in~ya~clothes//
And pop one~in~ya~toes...and blood~in~ya~flows run~out~ya~nose//(ponder on that one) (12)
As far~as~it~goes your audio aint audible, appluadable?//
Sound like a probable PATIENT FOR LIFE SUPPORT in da hospital//
I'll put a [bulls eye] on your ARTERY~tube and let da "FORCE" be wit you//
And throw a "dart" really~HARD at you and rip ya HEART apart~in~two//
What you~ought~to do is leave and go back~on~the~farm//
How could you throw a PUNCH with all that fucking FAT~ON~YOUR~ARM//
Back~to~ya thongs and ya pumps, get cracking~you~slut//
With them homo fags from the porno mags pecking~ya~butt/

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have a lil patience, something called da telephone.......

neways..........uppin dis shit

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nice drop....good shit.........uppin...................favor will be returned
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good battle guys heres my breakdown

wordplay=drama, he had better wordplay throughout his verse, expected more from dark for some reason

flow=drama, even tho it was a litte choppy and fell off at times, he still had better flow than dark

vocab=neither, no outstanding vocab in this one, but its not always necessary

structure=darkforce, the only reason he wins this one is becuz "drama's~verse~looked~liked~this" its not necessary, anybody wit sense can see your multis, no need for the (~~~~)
it is very newbish

multis=drama,nice multis in your verse, i didn't see any from dark, not saying you need them but it helps wit complexity and wordplay

creativity=drama, he verse was more creative, dark your verse seemed a little elementary in some areas
example "but I give ya props for not bein a coward, watchin me while I fucked ya moms in tha shower/"
just a little basic to me, therefore drama gets this one too

complexity=drama, nothing too complex but, dark put up a weak verse compared to drama as far as complexity

punches=drama, obviously drama takes this one wit some good punches, dark threw a few but didn't hit hard as drama

favorite line=drama
"As far~as~it~goes your audio aint audible, appluadable?//
Sound like a probable PATIENT FOR LIFE SUPPORT in da hospital//
nice punch, nothin fancy but i liked it

poll vote=C_Drama,obvioulsy drama took this wit a better everything, decent verse by darkforce seems like u haven't battled in a while, its cool though just keep spitten
good luck to both and please sont bitch about my breakdown, its my honest opinion

and to the voters, no using my quote as a vote, use your own breakdown, thankyou


holla

thnx for peepin da battle dunny and heh....still i dont use the "~" to show ppl where the multis at....iz jes how i write it, it helps flow my shit easier when im rapping it out, nah mean?


uppin dis for da second time

(#2)

i feel ya my nigga, i used to do it too then vets starting baggin on me for doing to much, just tone it down a little aight,
upppin for yall man ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
holla

uppin dis shit again, come on no sleeping on dis maayn

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that was some sick shit man the wordplay the flow the ......everything revolved aroun drama man.......imma vote for drama man.....shit was sick

Ok i think drama took this fo real.. i liked hes wordplay and that lil [elplanation] in the [][][]verrry original..

vote drama

uppin dis shiznit........................................... ................
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