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Old 10-06-03, 04:32 PM   #1
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Dedicated to my Princess

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I am thankful to have you in my life,

You are my center, what makes my world go round,.

When I’m not near you I miss you so much,

As the flower misses the suns rays at night,

My feelings for you, could never be truly expressed,

For there are no words or actions that could explain them,

I will never take you for granted, so precious you are to me,

A princess that is priceless to me,

Forever I will love and treasure you,

Hold you next to my heart for the rest of my life,

Through it all I will be there for you,

When you’re sad and down I’ll make you happy,

When your happy and you think it couldn’t be any better,

I make it that much better, doing the sweet things that I do,

Always and forever for you…….

My Devilish Princess,

My heart,

My soul,

My life

....................................I love you...................................


This is dedicated to my princess Devil. I have only started to surprise you and the greatest is yet to come....
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Old 10-06-03, 04:45 PM   #2
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iight

wow its so sweet, im a sucker when it comes to poems like this, and how i always wish they were to me, ive only ever gotten one song and its posted in my room right now, but i dont talk much now to the writer who i miss, but anywho, this was great for what it was, not much else to say

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Old 10-06-03, 07:22 PM   #3
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one filed, your a fucking herb (yes im hating) other wise ok drop for a newb... not gonna break it down, but if you gonna dedicate it to someone ADD RAW EMOTION not what you feel on the outside, but what you feel deep down inside, the deeper you are with your words, the better it will flow and gel together forming a great peice. the more emotion you poor into a drop, the better it sounds and expreses itself. to me looks like you ran threw it, it takes awhile, id second this drop take it back re do it with all the emotion you can sum up into it, then re post it...
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Old 10-06-03, 08:31 PM   #4
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simply put, y do u continue to copy me???...

oh for peeps who will be like..."don't hate on him" or "he's not copyin u", i know this kat in real, yes REAL, life and he's copied, or rather modified, a lot of my poetry work...

but for ur poem, where tha hell was tha deepness? to even come near pullin off a poem like mine's, u need to deepen ur thoughts through to tha very soul of ur being, figure out wat tha meaning of wat u r tryin to say is, then, as soon as u can, actually touch upon that deep feelin, U should be able to read it and almost be taken back by it before WE r, jus keep droppin but quit takin my wayz of writin...THANK YOU!
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Old 10-06-03, 09:25 PM   #5
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AngellicalR, id like to see one of your drops, sound like your the god of poets, like to see your shit, n thers no reason to be such a bitch, instead of sayin shit, take it to a poll or battle him in front lines or somethin.... damn




JT i wouldnt copy the bitches style.... but thats just me






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Old 10-06-03, 09:43 PM   #6
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yea i really modify ur shit, it's not like i'm eva gonna mount to something so y you gotta hate. You know how i am. i'll do my own thing, dun critiz my shit no more. out before i explode on u
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Old 10-06-03, 10:12 PM   #7
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Wtf.. there's even drama in poetry writing? Jeeeez..

Obviously I'm new here, If I don't know what I am doing, please correct me! I liked your poem.. however I do lose interest when the poem doesn't rhyme, because I like cute little things like that. ANYWAYS, I'm glad I read to the end of yours though, I enjoyed it

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Old 10-07-03, 10:07 AM   #8
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This writing is another id like to point out as a good one. You just let your emotions go. Well keep them coming. You have lots of talent and emotions so keep them flowing JT.

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Old 10-07-03, 12:18 PM   #9
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B-Squared? who r u to come on here n diss me? hmm??? i don't mind him modifing my stuff but he needs to stop doin it as much as he does, oh, n i have'nt been on for almost a month and in thus sayin i have'nt been droppin, i'm not a poem god, no, but i am internationally known in poetry books as a winner of many contests, both state and national, so i MUST be at least near a higher rank than most of tha peeps who drop on RB, THANK YOU!!!
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