got the idea for this song earlier this week when i was feeling out an app....let me know what ya think and hit me up with some comments and constructive criticism

hook:
this is my rap application, applying for a deal
rap application, time to show my skill
rap application, spit deadly venom
rap application, full of knowledge and wisdom
rap application, watch out, i'm coming for your position (2x)

verse 1:
the names MonStar, from the city of columbus
flows god like, "no wonder he hovers above us"
only 18, but better than most of these so called vets
running this shit but i aint got the job yet
rap application, applying for any position
dont care if its with diddy, a indy, or russell simmons (god bless, good night)
shit should form my own label and rap out my basement
underground, push lyrics anywhere, even in church like mase did
the boasting is blatant, my complexity replacing all your basics
rap application, want the presidents, shit call me ronald regan
my salary desire?, i want it all, more crazy than mariah
spew lava, scorch rappers like richard pryor
highly combustible, unsafe, like firestone tires
get heated like dryers, strike fear like michael myers
vampire!, only come out at dark like the night flyer
and i'm in the streets near you like telephone wires

hook:
this is my rap application, applying for a deal
rap application, time to show my skill
rap application, spit deadly venom
rap application, full of knowledge and wisdom
rap application, watch out, i'm coming for your position (2x)

verse 2:
went to public school, to advanced for my classes
in kindergarten, teaching psychology and mathematics
to college students, couldn’t grasp my concepts, too foolish
baffling people for years, gotcha thinking my first name is rubik’s
gotcha thinking i'm a cube, all around you, gotcha feeling boxed in
claustrophobic?, rap super hero, masked avenger that spits toxic
got people buzzing like the mic when you dropped it
my expertise, murdering emcees, cook em up, don’t need no recipes
verbally perplexing g's, in murdering mics i got a masters degree
intellectual superior, hearts cold as ice, like siberia
fuck up ya interior and exterior, get old school and throw spears at ya
no criminal record, but the list of emcees merked, a mile long
raps version of the fonze, ya'll cant even hold my comb (heyyyyy)
and fuck references, my words speak for themselves
rhyme scheme frightening, fits together like a shelf
Frankenstein, out of place like a giant in a land of elves

hook:
this is my rap application, applying for a deal
rap application, time to show my skill
rap application, spit deadly venom
rap application, full of knowledge and wisdom
rap application, watch out, i'm coming for your position (2x)

verse 3:
never had no previous job experience fuck a 9 to 5
i strive to survive, trying to make ends meat off the lyrics i contrive
rappers better swallow there pride and just thank god there alive
thank god there not one of the sick or deprived
thank god they made it out of the hell from which they derived
cause doing what you love, its a true blessing
i continue my progression of lyrical expression
would be nice to blow up, make money, no more stressing
i'm ill, using cancer as one of my references
but i digress, hows the interview goin, did i pass the test?
will my spitting lead to success?, would i even be accepted by the press?
does it even matter?, as long as i do what i love?
will i ever make it?, or will i fall short of?
my goals, if i get a chance i'm gonna take control
shake and break the mold, no matter what i stay inspired
cant wait till i hear those magic words,....your hired

hook:
this is my rap application, applying for a deal
rap application, time to show my skill
rap application, spit deadly venom
rap application, full of knowledge and wisdom
rap application, watch out, i'm coming for your position (2x)


let me know whay ya think....

its needs some work... but its a good metaphore i like it... you have some good potential... i'd like to see some more stuff writin by you... god job dawg


never had no previous job experience fuck a 9 to 5
i strive to survive, trying to make ends meat off the lyrics i contrive
rappers better swallow there pride and just thank god there alive
thank god there not one of the sick or deprived
thank god they made it out of the hell from which they derived
^^^^^good shit

This was a alright peice, your flow was pretty good, maybe try adding some multies to support the flow, wordplay was good, but overall it was a alright peice, good read i thought, Keep Dropping.

dope piece...steady flow...couple bugs but all in all good...
last verse had some very good lines 9-5 to lyrical expression...
keep posting..
...props

thanks for the feedback, upping for more...

looking for more feedback....

aight homie i thought that was a pretty good post, the flow was on target through most of it, the vocab was good, as was the wordplay, the topic was pretty original, the content was good, it made for a good read, ima be lookin for more shit by u man, keep postin, u got talent dawg.

yo, thanx for postin a reply on my shit, really appreciated.

peace.....

that was a pretty dope piece, i liked it your flow was there the vocab was a little simple in some places but isnt it the same for everyone, also add some multis and that should do the trick.. we should collab sometime.. peace

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