What Makes The Like. .

Caught Emotions, Tears in Eye to Know my life is Based off False Devotion,
My Mind Burns, the Image of Those Hellish Figures, continue Slow Erosion.
Explosions & Bullets, Feelings are Expressed, if u have the Guts to Pull it,
Based on Facts of Fiction, our World is in Danger by the Iggnorant & Foolish.
And Drugs Carrode our Streets, while Cops eat Donuts on there Potrol Beat,
Condenced Lies, to Say we Tried, as Kids sit at Home with None Too Eat.
With Wealth & Monoplies, where Happiness is the Antithesis of the Life,
For the People who Run our Country, & go to war with no Reason to Fight.
Diseases destroy Lives, America a place for Broken Hearts & Hurting
We asked to Be Treated with Respect, but theres still Children not Learning.
Words are Twisted, writers Black Listed, my Opinion is Corrected by You,
Enough Tombs to Fill a State & Everyone has had Enough of Paying there Dues.
Families Abuse, Kids Tramatized by seeing a Loved On Die So Young,
Singing Songs when Death is Here, but they Already Know the Soon to Come.
Can we all Tell whats Wrong & Right, let the world know threw the Songs I Write,
& I Know now that life isnt Perfect, so I live it how it is, What the Worlds Like. . .

descent peice here dawg,good use of vocab and flow was mostly on point,liked afew of the points mentioned

With Wealth & Monoplies, where Happiness is the Antithesis of the Life,
For the People who Run our Country, & go to war with no Reason to Fight

liked that,had som meta's and imagery,need to work on multies and jus finishin touches but good drop,keep elevatin.

Peace

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Good imagery...
Nice vocab...
Flow was nice...

Kind of short in my mind...
Dont know why...


But good drop man

iLL drop here man...Really down to earth...True shit...I liked it...And could relate to it a lot...Structure was good...Rhymin' was good...

Based on Facts of Fiction, our World is in Danger by the Iggnorant & Foolish.

I liked that line...The beginning was dope...Keep it up peace

Thanks All..

werd, i gotta agree wit what mentill said. I can def relate to this shit. Your content was good, vocab and rhyme was good and on point to. Good post, keep it up, 1

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" So for the 2nd time [The Pharisses] summoned the man who had been blind and said
"Speak the truth before God. We know this man is a sinner."
"Wether he is a sinner I do not know."
:The man replied:
"All I know is this...Once I was blind and now I can see"
John 1x 24-26

I like tha whole flow in general. I agree wit all of them. This gets a 8.5 outta 10. Keep droppin dawg. 1

Yeah this was a good piece, it was worth the read, it flowed very well i thought, you had good vocab, your content was good too, as well was the topic, overall good piece, keep dropping.

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