yo, normal rules, 5-15 lines, and brother, no hateing pleze

yo, u only got 15 mins from check in, u spit first this time dogg....
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yo, u commin or what?..........
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hello????..................................
do i have to spit fir5st or what?.......
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grabs the mic


heres this mic take this shit and shove in ur ass, fucking thow your body in a tank with sea bass/
break btoh of your leg so that you have to get a cast, u won't get no food so face it ur gonna have to fast//-1
i might just as well be a psycho path killer, and we'll see who is the blood spiller/
fucking slit your thoat make n it much iller, and be a nitrous gas filler//-2
full your mouth with gas, lite it up like ur ass/
move to antoher country and get a pass, port! they don't want you there and send you back rite fast//-3
grab this shit like money and kife, it rite fats! grab my knife/
stab you til you can't stand! oh there ur wife, fuck this shit and take both of your fucking lifes//-4
fucking take some fucking pills, and see how many kills/
that i can make as the blood spills, i don't have nothing more that will fill//-5

yo mike, get off your throne, my tanks to fast get cought by those sea bass/
i'll kill you like hannable, cause i'm a canable, so thanks to you, i wont fast./
your still a rook not cut out for a flyweight, and i condone, this wont end up a STALEMATE/
fuck man, you'll dig out a knife, kill me, and my wife?/
well there is 2 problems, i dont have a wife, and you'll be 6 feet under cause i'll take you life with your very own knife/
i just knocked you out with fists and feet, i'm the only rapper who cant be beat/
and you, what a joke, thinking you could beat me, the on the onle, PC/
there will be blood and strewed across your room, i'll rip your flesh from you body, like the paper from my wall/
cut off you dick and put in in a doggy bag, makes good treats for my pup, cause its so small/
well thats it, i dont need to spit no more of this shit/ i'm out.

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opener:Pine
structure:both weak~tie
wordplay:Pine
punches:Pine
personals:none really.
finisher:Real
my voteine- he came a lil harder

both of yall need to work on ya structure


aiight

yo will sum 1 plz vote on these plz
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=82876
and
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=82737

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thanks for the vote of confidence, but could you vote on the site as well.............................
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heres this mic take this shit and shove in ur ass, fucking thow your body in a tank with sea bass/
break btoh of your leg so that you have to get a cast, u won't get no food so face it ur gonna have to fast//-1
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spelling errors detract the punch BOTH but it was still failry effective

stab you til you can't stand! oh there ur wife, fuck this shit and take both of your fucking lifes//-4
fucking take some fucking pills, and see how many kills/
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stab you till you cant stand?
weak as hell and had no real pick up afterwards


PINE

well there is 2 problems, i dont have a wife, and you'll be 6 feet under cause i'll take you life with your very own knife/
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the fact that you dont have a wife is irrelevant to this battle
if you woulda deleted that you might have had a good punch lol

cut off you dick and put in in a doggy bag, makes good treats for my pup, cause its so small/
well thats it, i dont need to spit no more of this shit/ i'm out.
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i hate it when people end a verse with *IM OUT* it saddens me
overall you both were on the same level and it was apparent

nonetheless the winner is the real mc

and by teh way BOTH OF YOU SHOULD BE FORBIDDEN to use the word KNIFE......
but good battle guys

please pay back the favor on hot ice vs hazy
or libba dee vs hazy

if you want a vote GIVE a vote

yo willibob007, if i won most of the catagories then why did you vote for the real MC?..........
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