This is a track from my CD, Tha New. I ain't picked out a beat, so to those who read this shit, lemme know if any beats come to mind. Greatly appreciated.

Concept: Finally in the rap game, after much delay. Bout to take control. Hope you feelin it.


Yes, I'm finally here
Took a few years
But i'm hearing the cheers
Nearing the fears
Swallowed um up, so I could see things clear
Formula, causing the mass paranoia
Been known as the Rhyme Ripper
A MC Destroyer
I was overlooked, never booked
No opportunities that I could've took
I know I should've shook
Hands with the man who had the plans
And the promise to pack me with more money than I could stand
Promised I would be the hottest rapper in the land
He believed in me, like no one else would
No I believe in me, like no one else can or could
Now tell me, is this shit fully understood?
Tha New, been in the the works for sometime now
I've been writing rhymes N lightin' dimes for sometime now
Trouble pas, present good, future look mag-nif-icent
I brag to those give-a-shit, mag to those who act-a-bitch
Dad to those who see me as an older brother (Kids)
Formula, finally here, impact like none other

Don't nobody worry bout a thing, I know C-P-R
Saving rap, Breath, I made it this far
No looking back, my time is finally here
Finally fuckin with Rap, I'm finally here

I came in this game, with tracks ready
Back's heavy
Carrying a lod, tryna keep rap steady
People are questioning me
Askin me how
I'm gonna change shit, they havin' they doubts
What sort of substance could I generate?
To coordinate rap music, use-it to create a clean slate
I see too many MC's gong commercial
Too many not real
Too many don't know the deal
But they pretend they do
For money they will
Me?, I'm not concerned with the cash flow
'Cause not that my ass it out the door
That's the last concern I have anymore
I am concerned however, when bullets are released
Increased awareness when they pull-it and aim it at me
That is my reality, most don't like the fact
That I'ma run this shit, makeover N take over rap
Live with it, understand that I see things clear
Been waitin for too many years
To my boys, Yes, Formula is finally here

Don't nobody worry bout a thing, I know C-P-R
Saving rap, Breath, I made it this far
No looking back, my time is finally here
Finally fuckin with Rap, I'm finally here

YO...IM A BIG FAN OF WORDPLAY...AND FLOW

AND I LIKED THIZ PIECE CUZ I FELT BOTH THOZE IN UR VERSE

STRUCTURE WAS DIF...BUT ALL THE OTHER STUFF MADE UP 4 IT..

keep upin...u got some shit here...

sry dont do audio..or beatz..otherwise id be happy 2 help ya..

good luck

great verse

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THE RESTRICTED WUN HAS ROZE 2 CONQUER.....AGAIN!


I'M BACK!!!

yeah this was a pretty good piece, it made a good read i thought, it flowed pretty decent through out the piece, your vocab was pretty good, overall it was a alright piece, keep dropping.

and if you could return some feedback..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83050

this peice was written like a true noobie, bravo, for being a hurb.