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Old 10-05-03, 09:52 PM   #1
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People take me fo a joke but they dont want to feel the pain, I am the underground king so don't use my name in vain, I am on the rapbattles droping bombs in shit , look at u nigga ,u look like u ben blowing a dick. So don't fuck wit me , man u way out yo leage , Iam know to make a nigga bleed in this birmingham streets,


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Old 10-05-03, 09:58 PM   #2
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ok well first you should put the lines underneath each other so it looks good...work on internals so it helps the flow of things...and try using some multies...also try using some metas it makes it a more interesting read...but keep at it...keep dropping.
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Old 10-06-03, 01:01 AM   #3
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aight,aight jus like masta c said i mean you new jus work on it.multies ,more vocab,and errything.but i liked it a lil bit.keep spittin tho mane.holla


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