Trapped in a black box for crackin a cops skull wide open
He took my smokes n told me to shut up when i hadn't even spoken
The retched smell of these puke stained walls got me feelin nauseous
In such darkness i cant fall asleep, only sleep when knocked unconcious
Eyes wander thoughtless then i see the resemblence of this room
To what my future holds, pitch black, like my cop inflicted wounds
How did i place myself in this foresaken position i'm livin
I guess it goes back to when acceptance was makin wrong dicisions
Nothin gained from nights of crimes to afford booze n drugs
I still regret stabbing that man only to prove i was cool to thugs
I'm 22 now with no diploma, no talents, no one who cares
No one to say i love you, no one to look at who likes catchin u stare
I brought it on myself and i've grown accustomed to myself
My mind doesnt feel right though, maybe a psychiatrist might help

*food is slid under the door* "enjoy your cornbread motherfucker, hahahahahaha"

Whats that gaurd so happy about he works in solitary confinement
Guess upset he never became a real cop, laughin is how he hides it
I got three years left in this joint but i deserve it for a hit n run
Would've gotten life if they found the hidden murder gun
A rat runs in the corner, chewin on the remains of cornbread
Huggin my knees I ponder. this feels right, I deserve this torment
No matter how hard i try, I cant escape the life of a criminal
Its like my life is a u.s army commercial, devious and subliminal
No ones gonna hire a man charged of attempted murder
So I got no choice but to live crooked n commit more murders
But the people i killed were innocent, with a wife and children
How can i live with myself, i need to be jailed for life, i killed them
I belong in here, the streets ain't safe with me free to roam
I need a life of solitary confinement, i always need to be alone
My future and mind are one with darkness, i dont deserve the light of day

*door opens* "ok, get up, your goin back to your cell"

Please gaurd, say it was an accident, put me out of my misery
*stands in front of the gaurd*
its better this way

*click* *boom* *click* *boom*

Here I lay watchin the light reflect off the blood forming a crimson lake
And with my last ounce of life, blink one last time n watch the rat escape

i really liked this shit....love the flow...the vocab....the whole storyline....its original....the whole rat thing was ill..

this shit just started off nice and was consistent the whole way...look forward to readin more of ya shit.....nice


feedback on this wont ya

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=82853

Yeah this was a good piece i thought, it made a nice read, it flowed pretty well through out the whole piece, your vocab was good, the content was good as well, overall id say a good piece, keep dropping.

Yo I like this originality. No one i know ever wrote shit like this. U should do this in Audio. If u need sound effects and shit I'll do that for ya. But back on topic... this gets a 9 outta 10. Keep droppin.

i appreciate all the feedback ya'll and 2 deadly spits .. what do you make beats with ?? or you just mean sound effects, i'm planning on making this into an audio i just haven't found a beat that would be consistent with the rhyme scheme. uuppiinn.