it's irrational how tha national guard is factional/
but it states it owns tha whole "satisfational"/
money back guaranteed, u'll get it for free?/
than how come i neva got my money back? wat about me?/
i addressed it correctly, wit tha 4-1-4 and sent it out tha door/
but tha shit i ordered came back to be shattered wit tha contents in "no more"/
tha condition i got it in was beyond wishin/
gettin my visa reapproved so i could go down to tha boon-docks for a mission/
wit a present, do not open til christmas/
but while they sleepin, we start tha dishin/
a body here, two there, and another while he was snorin/
had a body count of 187, but tha shit got borin/
so we left, but before that, we smashed open a desk/
and grabbed tha hidden chest, that's wat i call a theft/
cause wat was inside was something I need to hide/
a fuckin chain letter that stated "U WILL DIE!"/

decided to put together different horror stories into one, tha whole "psycho killa on tha loose" hook, tha movie "The Ring", and a tha pirate movies...all based on an event that happened to my guy...i'm sure u knows wat happed???

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This was a pretty decent piece i thought...it flowed pretty well i thought as i read through it...vocab was pretty good...content was good as well...the concept was pretty nice...lines could be more even though..but overall it was a good piece..keep at it and keep dropping.

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