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Old 10-08-03, 05:54 PM   #1
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kewl rap, yo

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I'm droppin' lines like clumsy crack heads/
which gets the Feds to follow my treads/
They're always up my ass, i can't get away/
They follow me so much my threads start to frey/
Thats when i start to get really pissed/
I start walking around with clenched fists/
The next person to tap me on the shoulder/
Will get a fist to they're face like a fucken boulder/
Most likely they'll be knocked the fuck out/
I'll put you in my cellar until you thrash about/
I'm not going to feed you anything, bitch/
Soon you'll have an anarexic twitch/
When you stop brething i'll un-cuff you/
Then i'm gonna eat a bowl of chicken stew/
Right in front of you/

HAHAHHAHHAH!
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Old 10-08-03, 06:55 PM   #2
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Ok...this wasnt to bad...it flowed alright, lost it at spots, but try using internals to help support the flow so it flows better...try using some multies too...your vocab was ok but it should be up'd...just work on elevating really...keep at it...and keep dropping.
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Old 10-08-03, 07:48 PM   #3
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uppin
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Old 10-08-03, 07:51 PM   #4
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ok, flow was ok, fell off at points though...vocab was ok but could use some uppin...could use some multies...overall not bad but you got some work to do...keep droppin, you'll get better...
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