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Old 10-03-03, 11:14 PM   #1
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He's the magician, he's the trick, and he's the whole act
He's the assistant, the volunteer, and the rabbit pulled out the hat
His whole life he's had to work at, gettin his whole act polished
Untill the day he met a girl that with one look demolished
All his dream hopes and cares, with one flirty stare
Was always too busy to care, girls and his magic didn't compare
He always had one love in life, that was to make people smile
While puttin them in awe, and makin the time he took worth the while
He could pull cards outta no-where, take a penny from your ear
He could saw himself in half, show no fear, shed no tears
He could make himself dissapear, he made this his carreer
He lived for the crowd to cheer, cause it made his life worth while
He would never perform for money, all he needed was the people to smile
It made him feel like a child, the bright colored sparks he'd make appear
Were like a whirl-wind of freedom, dazed like headlights on a deer
But this girl caught his attention, like the first time he saw magic
Their eyes connected and made fireworks, another first time for a different magic
This story isnt tragic, but it shows the power that all women have
Cause as a magician he was a whole, but with her he was sawed in half
She wanted to be with him all the time, and it was a mutual feeling
After only being together six months, he found himself with a ring kneeling
Asking her to be his forever, through sickness and in health
He confessed his undying love for her, and said with her he needed no wealth
But he didnt get the expected reaction, no fireworks lit up the sky
She replied with hesitation, no explanation, just good-bye
The magician had never felt this before, never had experienced these emotions
Was alwasy too caught up in magic, working shows, or doin promotions
He tried to forget about her, but it plagued his mind all day
And after 6 months, he relized that his life was in dismay
Everyday he'd sit and wonder, would she ever come back so he could see her
But as each day went by she wouldnt return, it became more and more clear
Finally he decided, that he needed a final act to top off his career
He thought up a brand new trick, no rabbits, he wouldnt make anything appear
It was clear in his mind, he made sure he had the whole thing planned
Gathered a crowd, then made his life dissapear with the slight of hand

This is the part where you get to decide what happened to him...
Ima leave it open to interpretation, because everyone has a different
outlook on life.. I have my own thoughts and ideas of what happened,
but that might not suit, or please you... so suit yourself
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Old 10-04-03, 02:23 AM   #2
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umm pritty good drop homie i was feelin it good flow n all.......propz
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Old 10-04-03, 03:05 AM   #3
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well done mental one......good show..it does have a nice flow
makes my work suck goats..goats..you may be mental.. im insane
you with crazed rabbits in hats.here i am pulling goat stories ass
go ahead laugh. it whats need to be crazed n delusional . just like me


k im done fucking around ..truly is great work...looking forward to reading more
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Old 10-04-03, 05:17 AM   #4
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^^^ummm ok thx.... i guess lol uppin for some more feedback
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Old 10-04-03, 06:15 PM   #5
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come on ewhy does all my shit get slept on???
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Old 10-04-03, 06:33 PM   #6
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This shit was tight. Very descriptive and it made me see him doing the actions. It had good flow. I'd say an 8.5 outta ten. Keep them shits coming.
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Old 10-05-03, 03:10 PM   #7
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ok...2nd page... uppin
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Old 10-06-03, 03:16 AM   #8
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last up
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Old 10-06-03, 08:11 AM   #9
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K this was nice, ...u stayted on topic, ...had some decent vocab , ...it was a nice read, ..maybe this is kinda personal but the he he he like in 5 lines, i dun like it^but in this it was ok ^..nice drop


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Old 10-07-03, 09:45 PM   #10
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i was concious of all the he's... i did it on purpose... it was the describing lines... i dunno, my style is different from everyone i guess... thanks for the feedback.... anyone else?
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