I rather pull the trigger then some bitch pull the trigger on me/
A thug heart so you knowing ain't know way that i'll flee/
It's plain to see gotta survive throughout these hardtimes/
Wiping these punks out the map who ever i dispise/
It's time to ride hitting my foes whenever passing bye signature bullets so that you know a g arrive in town/
It seem i found what was keeping me down my fucking homies/
I Couldn't believe they shited on me, see this friendship is a of way of getting closer to money/
They see you living large nigga and you see they living bombing/
Not funny but what can i do i'm just a human like you still on the block selling for a pair of shoes

was aright, i'd suggest firstly working on your structure. Try and keep your lines ending at the same point, this should develop flow, then you can work on content.

yeah this was a nice drop. the only thing i really see wrong wit this is the structure the vocab could have been upped a lil but overall this was a good piece. 7/10

hit this up wit an honest opinion.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84261

It wsnt allright, .....it was weak ,....ur concept was played,...tryin to be a G , ....but expression so its obvious u not,......u need to up ur vocab, ...u got some flow, ...up ur structure,...up ur concept, .....and keep ya head up

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