yo im Toppin-tha-best wit wordplay, mettas, multies strong enough ta try stoppin-tha-best/
stone-lyrix b rockin-ya-vest ill take half ya life..leave..come back n try coppin-tha-rest
im droppin-u-pest hollow point shellz strong enough ta be knockin-ya-chest
n try stoppin-ya-breath its like changin subjects the way im droppin-ya-death

try beefin-wit-me cuz im better then the best...leave ya body in the home n ya Teef-in-tha-sea
r u seein-tha-E cuz thas tha side i ride...where im so sick i be stingin-tha-beez

u fixin-a-diss but i still win....so i put a line through ya name like a stick-in-my-list
try wishin-a-kiss n get a mouth full of my bars hot enough ta fukkin deminish-this-bitch

hes tha best in the country so i try to finish-him-quick
his own crew sayin im hot so theres no use in lettin him
finish-his-spit

im beatin-this-hoe he can spit a gallon im still gonna be drinkin-his-flow
they wasnt thinkin-he'd-show hows he the best when i already beaten-him-yo ????????

ayo give me some feedback on this aight its jus a lil keystyle i did

dont sleep on this shit.....give some feedback n ill return tha favor

its ooookay.....need more practice

keep spitting tho

yea right get tha fukk outta here haha let me see u drop sumthin hotter then me homie then ill start takin ur advice

lookin for more feedback n not from no new cats that dont kno what they talkin about i bet hes bitin this anyways haha well cats that kno what they talkin about give feedback

Ok well i like it for whateva stupid reason...you kept a good structure throughout...but it may have been more interesting to switch up between the way you did it and another rhyme or flow scheme... just to keep it fresh and clean...

{Peace}

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yeyea i feel ya thas what i did to a verse i wrote before but no1 could understand it so im jus gonna keep it simple cuz sum cats arent complexed enough to understand that shit nah'mean