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Old 10-06-03, 09:47 AM   #1
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String Foundation

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Life Is Played On A Big Foundation Of Strings
& When Luck Plucks.. Thats The Song It Sings
Whether Your Stuck In A Rut Living For Things
Or Struck w/ All The Good Fortune It Brings
So Often It Seems.. The Pitch Is Type Wild
Dont Walk From The Plate, Take It & Smile
Wait Till Its In Your Zone.. It Might Take You A While
& While You Wait On Your Own
Dont Keep Fate In Denial
Cause When Its Shown.. It Has The Face Of A Child
Its Intentions Are Pure.. In A Sense, Innocense Is Its Core
It Doesn't Hurt You On Purpose.. Its Purpose Is More
Of A Message Sent To Let You Know The Score
& Just When You Think You Know Whats In Store
It Sells Out Of The Product You Were Searchin For
Is It Worth It Or.. Will You Get Caught Napping
Called Out On Strikes, Acting Like It Didnt Happen
Ship's Going Down & Your The Strapped In Captain
A Black Hole Of Bad Actions Pulling You Back In
But That's When... You Raise Your Chin & Be Strong
Keep Trying On Your Violin & Get In Tune w/ The Song
Assume Your Wrong, Change The Actions & Words You Sing
Then Take That Bat.. & Bash The Foundation Of Strings

Point Being: Make Your Own Music.. Dont Let A Couple Of Bad Notes Ruin Your Symphony
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Old 10-06-03, 09:54 AM   #2
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Hey I liked that. It has a nice flow to it and I like the wordplay. I love this line-
Wait till its in your zone.. it might take you a while
& while you wait on your own
don't keep fate in denial...

Very clever.
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Old 10-06-03, 09:57 AM   #3
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Old 10-06-03, 10:30 AM   #4
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This was nice^, ur flow was good, and ur rhymes, were real nice in vocab , ...^^ this was a good piece

Specially liked these lines:
Its Intentions Are Pure.. In A Sense, Innocense Is Its Core
It Doesn't Hurt You On Purpose.. Its Purpose Is More

Iunno the message/concept within , was a real original and nice one, ...props

Can u hit up Gods Journal ^^ Preciated
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Old 10-06-03, 11:59 AM   #5
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Old 10-06-03, 01:11 PM   #6
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Nice drop Evolve...Good point to make...It does happen a lot...Keep droppin man...Peace
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Old 10-06-03, 01:17 PM   #7
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You must know when you get dope cuz the replys are short
...And Damn...Those replys couldn't of got any shorter...lol

This piece had a great flow...the topic was original...Content related and was delivered to the topic

Thats what makes it dope^^...Cuz all was close to perfection

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Old 10-07-03, 03:39 PM   #8
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Old 10-07-03, 03:39 PM   #9
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it was straight, nothin too fancy but morely simple

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Old 10-07-03, 04:02 PM   #10
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You Are Obviously An Idiot & Dont Reply To My Open Mics Ever
Again You Newb Bastard...

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Old 10-07-03, 05:46 PM   #11
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yo what the fuck was he on about i thought that this shit was dope....good topic.....original....peace..... keep droppin....
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Old 10-08-03, 12:14 PM   #12
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Old 10-08-03, 12:21 PM   #13
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Very inspiring piece, my man.

Helluva cure for writer's block.

This flowed great, really great...had nice vocab, and a message that was worth something.

Good, effective imagery with the baseball metas.

I'd give it a 8.75 outta 10.

Damn nice work.

Return the favor, please.

Asking advice from God...
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Old 10-08-03, 03:39 PM   #14
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Old 10-08-03, 03:50 PM   #15
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hell yea homie real nice peice it had perfect flow good vocab n everything son keep it up n keep droppin

hit this keystyle up i did n give some feedback aight ~1~
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=84254
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