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10-06-03, 04:03 PM | #1 | ||||||
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*This was somethin i wrote in Rapworlds, so some parts u may not know wat im talkin about, other than that, its a normal drop*
Why must be endure the pain, seems the pain never stops Ridin as the clock tocs waitin for the return of Pac Like Divac, we slam hard, but in return, an elbow smack The government resembles Jack which goes to show da boss slacks Jill tumblin after, Bush's short reign is soon to be a wrap I would represent the black, but life'll shorten & that's a fact A comic said it right, a president can't be a black Chris Rock made it a joke, but behind it was a fact Women want respect but can't keep their legs closed Men want a fam. but can't stay away from da hoes Pac and Bigs beef, now diseased, went into history A 3-Ring star encounters pussy, commit adultery, no victory Whats wrong with hiphop today, answer that my niggaz The game is full of haters, wrong move, they pull da trigga Cheaters in the streets, like spades, watch the re-niggers Its a mind game, a clique can go from 6 to 0 figuraz What's wit wannabes around, Lil' Persy, u aint down Show me empty pockets, wat u bought, i found on da ground JaRule, why u beefin, nine shots the nigga took You a cheesy lame, a nigga could murder u wit a hook Now Eminem, ya crazy kid,ya rhymes crown u da white don But some ya lines is jibberish & ya life was told different by ya moms Now, Jay-Z, you went from RAW, to nine, then to five Compared to ya weak album, Nas murdered u wit "Last Real Nigga Alive" Now in my opinion, the last verse murdered ya whole diss song Prolly cuz u droppin a double album...well thats just wrong First, Chris is ya man, then u say u better than BIG No that don't make me a stan, just pointin it out, the fact is Im way past the past, delt wit failures, Dougie, Paul, & Tyke For the record, 1 was a pussy, a b***h, and an ugly dyke Let's see, Dougie & Paula couldn't rap, Tyke was on my dick Talk s**t like a broke trick, neva onced hit wit a diss Cloaked behind an MC, I won't mention any names The dyke was blind, give him a ticket, he couldnt see game Now his man on the other hand, he battled like a determined fan As a pressured King, I choked, he boasts, I revived, Tyke ran D***, I spit like im holdin the crown, cuz i was destined fa the throne Descending after the realist thug poets, Pac, BIG, & Nasir Jones Known as MC Illest, earlier when RW was just a freestyle gig Rafer Alston of rap, make way for da BLACK WIZ *Recognize...recognize.....recognize(fades out)* |
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10-09-03, 05:32 PM | #2 | ||||||
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holla at da kid
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10-11-03, 04:47 PM | #3 | ||||||
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10-11-03, 05:03 PM | #4 | ||||||
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Overall, it was a nice drop.
Strong points: I liked your lines about the commercial rapper, jay z, eminem, pac, etc. Weak points: Even though it's just an open mic, you could have thrown in some punchlines. Also, use multis to help it flow better, the flow was a little choppy. Nice flow, though. Keep it up kid. Last edited by c0zmick : 10-11-03 at 05:05 PM. |
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10-11-03, 05:04 PM | #5 | |||||||
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that wasnt bad homie, i was feelin ur flow the most though, u had some nice wordplay and vocab, ur content and topic were both original, and i caught on to what u were sayin pretty easily, but i dont suggest u recycle ur shit, u gotta keep new shit comin, so ill be lookin for ya kid.
yo if u have the time can u hit this battle up wit an honest vote? http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...4656#post834656 itd be much appreciated. peace...... |
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10-11-03, 05:04 PM | #6 | ||||||
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coo', but to c0zmick, punch lines, why?? Its not like it was a diss.
thanks anywayz to both for da feedback, and i'll hit the battle up later |
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10-11-03, 05:12 PM | #7 | ||||||
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yeah overall a nice drop but u need to keep elevatin but the vocab and wordplay were good hey return da favour check out the battle between gbacd and yog_dogg
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10-11-03, 05:14 PM | #8 | ||||||
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that was a pretty good flow for a newb but u need to elevate but he thats okay i see potential in ur flows so keep droppin
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10-11-03, 11:41 PM | #9 | ||||||
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i'll agree with gotaloveforrap though
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10-12-03, 01:18 PM | #10 | ||||||
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thanks fo da feedback
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10-15-03, 08:17 PM | #11 | ||||||
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holla
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