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10-05-03, 05:44 PM | #1 | |||||||
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The Reaper And The Flowers
IP: 9588 E886
There is a Reaper, whose name is Death,
And, with his sickle keen, He reaps the bearded grain at a breath, And the flowers that grow between. "Shall I have naught that is fair?" saith he; "Have naught but the bearded grain? Though the breath of these flowers is sweet to me, I will give them all back again." He gazed at the flowers with tearful eyes, He kissed their drooping leaves; It was for the Lord of Paradise, He bound them in his sheaves. "My Lord has need of these flowerets gay," The Reaper said, and smiled; "Dear tokens of the earth are they, Where he was once a child. "They shall all bloom in the fields of light, Transplanted by my care, And saints, upon their garments white, These sacred blossoms wear." And the mother gave, in tears and pain, The flowers she most did love; She knew she should find them all again In the fields of light above. O, not in cruelty, not in wrath the Reaper came that day; "Twas an angel visited the green earth, And took the flowers away. |
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10-05-03, 05:51 PM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: 9127 5371
Wow...This was a pretty awesome peiece. I loved the flow and the way each line fit in just perfectly. I like your style..I have one question, Does writting something like this take long for you? Just curious...Really nice, Keep posting...
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10-05-03, 06:33 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: B20F 67F7
This one took me about an hour to think of it. Maybe an hour and a half.
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10-05-03, 06:34 PM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: A10D 4933
I got it from a story though, and jus' turn it into a poem.
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10-05-03, 07:31 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 9127 5371
ohh okay..I see...You did a good job on it...keep it up
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10-05-03, 09:01 PM | #6 | ||||
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IP: 340D 8B8F
Yeah i agree...this was a great piece...feeling the emoticion in this one as i read it...i liked the way you layed it out and structured it...your word choice was good i thought too...i liked this piece...overall it was good...keep at it.
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10-06-03, 09:26 AM | #7 | ||||||
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This was a great peice. Word structure was great and it drawed me in and made me think. keep it up
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10-11-03, 03:09 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
Great post. It brought my attention in really close, and it had a lot of feeling presented. Brought back many memories for me of those who have passed. Sentence structure was good and choice of words were good too. Overall, I liked it. Keep them comin.
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10-13-03, 09:51 AM | #9 | |||||||
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IP: 0115 91DB
good drop homie, very well writtin, nothing really to critque but ths line really made me see potential..
"My Lord has need of these flowerets gay," The Reaper said, and smiled; "Dear tokens of the earth are they, Where he was once a child. "They shall all bloom in the fields of light, Transplanted by my care, And saints, upon their garments white, These sacred blossoms wear." ^^...very well wrote , good imagery...good creativity as well...peep myn faith..
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