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10-13-03, 05:04 PM | #1 | ||||||
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God Told Me To Post This
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With rap i can ocapella/ with a beretta I'll roc-a-fella/
pushin 6 through your Sean Jean sweata/ the aim is stella/ like Reggie Milla making dollars for the Indiana Pacars/ look// I bronx with a AR 15/ got enough ammo to raise the deceased and kill the living/ the reaper takes lives worse then a Japanese camacazi/ been flashed more times then a fucken paparazzi/ prayed for the jews who were crucified by the nazies/ my poetry/ issues god speed/ I jack up rocks bigger then J Lo's wedding ring/ honestly/ the truth is I wasn't born out a pussy/ the docs ripped me out my mom's belly/ I had a mic in grasp/ waiting to battle Pac, Nas, and Biggy/ call it my destiny/ lived in misery for centuries/ this lyrical prophecy/ has a mob of you screaming Anarchy/ had a brother who died in Philly/ took two shoots from a milli'/ whats the remedy/ my whole block held by a semi/ I write in chemestry/ I know you herd of me/ the man with zero casualties/ most of you aint rap/ you just acting/ I kill acadomy/ award winning/ g's your just silly its got a flow you must go by its my style might not fit you |
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10-13-03, 06:17 PM | #2 | |||||||
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aight holmes that was ok for a newbie, ur structure was hella weak though, try postin ur rhyme vertically down the page, u should include more multis, and u should elevate on ur vocab and wordplay a little......and u should write about a not so played topic, so work on that next time, u got ability so keep workin at it.....
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10-13-03, 08:15 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: DE1B 40B8
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10-13-03, 10:37 PM | #4 | |||
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