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Old 10-17-03, 06:22 PM   #1
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GanGsTa0FiED

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slapin shit up for the fuck of it
winnin fo the luck of it
get stuck wit it
nine shells flyin yo way *pause*
bitch ur impitent
fuckin wit me u aint innocent
this gangsta-shit- im into it
get back to the pussy clinic
b4 u get droped wit some shells
young ass soldiers runnin up
gettin stunned up
i dun gotta use bullets to abuse
just spit at u mentally - bitch, ull bruse
havin u in a confuse - state of mind
irrate bind concertrate
deffinition of real ness
illness- just cuz u got H.I.V dun mean u can spit ill
u aint G cuhz *pause*
chill - havent stunned u in a minute
impitent~sinnin shit- cerebral flow
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Old 10-17-03, 09:16 PM   #2
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uppin
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Old 10-17-03, 09:24 PM   #3
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The multies are there, it has a nice flow though the HIV reference is a played line. It was simple. I would recommend putting more wordplay and vocab into this that would make it more interesting to read.

Now if you would be so kind hit up my open mic- Asylum Gates/Dear Omens, sadly it is getting slept on
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Old 10-17-03, 09:35 PM   #4
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k thanks for up nigga
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Old 10-18-03, 10:59 AM   #5
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i thought this was decent enought, the only thing i didn't like was the rhyming of the same word, over and over, i dontreally like that style, and it seemed a bit basic......but decent.....peace
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Old 10-18-03, 12:21 PM   #6
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i think this flow was pretty tight. u could have used some better vocab, but your structure was tight and u had some good rhymes.

nice drop

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Old 10-18-03, 11:10 PM   #7
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yea thanks
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