Freestyle about alternative life for me (this would never happen)


overlap of eyelashes, alternative life seen in vague patches//
too young to have hopes dashed dreams snatched visions bashed//
too young to compensate without being brash, visions of muzzle flash//
blood spurts from artery slashed, spend last days in haze cuz of hash//
loss of cash...wasnt there already, life path unsteady power struggles within me like jet li//
no longer speakin in firstperson Pax returns to ways of arson, setting fire to lifestyle OD on acid like staind its been awhile//
looks like hes destiny's bastard child, everybody sayin his name but intimacy mild tired of bein a surviva//
trapped in the urban wild mouth shows no trace of saliva, blood alcohol level rising, drunk driva//
bridge closa, road base just got wida, speech slurrin kid no longa a fighta//
neva been a bita but he chewin on his lip life expanctancy shorta, muscles tighta//
skills lost the dead can not be a writa, cremation performed usin cig lightas//
kids future was gettin brighta, ended it due to the lighta it got brighta still//
just lost his will, life lost his attention blame parents for no ADD pills//
stories written gave people chills, nobody knew what he was writing about was real//
Young author, his work companies steal, no more produced now frustration level had its fill//
my dream state has now been fulfilled, my alternative life stilled, on the real myself i wont kill//


aight yall that was about...7 minutes...tell me what u think

^^originally my freestyle tryout for RoA but i feel like postin it in here too...

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