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Old 10-07-03, 09:39 PM   #1
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Slowness Of Time

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it VERY short... im at work and i cant wait to get off so i keyed a short verse

Why does time move slower, when you're waiting for something to happen
Like when your rappin, ur anxious, anticipating the crowd to start clappin
Your fingers start snappin, tryin' not to think about the wait
You try to concentrate and relate, but it seems that half speed for eternity is your fate
You look for something to do, sing, read, or play with a ball
You tell yourself you wont look, but find your eyes gazing up the wall
But not at the wall itself, but the little circle that controlls the time
The light hitting it makes it shine, and again it reminds you, of the slowness of time
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Old 10-07-03, 09:40 PM   #2
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i guess this is more of a poem... can someone move it??
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Old 10-08-03, 02:45 AM   #3
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hate when shit gets slept on ...anything..
i liked the short piece.....the first couple a lines were the best ones in my opinion...tight how u wrote this while waiting to get outta work...good concept...would go great with longer verses...


dont sleep on this please

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Old 10-19-03, 08:48 PM   #4
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ZZZzzzzZZZzzZzZzz you people sleep
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Old 10-19-03, 09:05 PM   #5
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It was a good piece and I liked the concept. I can't get too indepth because it was too short to show your full potential. Anyways, it was good.

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Old 10-19-03, 09:20 PM   #6
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Old 10-20-03, 09:49 AM   #7
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yo this peice was short as you said but it had meaning and it was on topic all the way thru it reminds me of how i feel at work as well.. i just hate it when times against me.. especially at work.. i felt the peice all the way through the vocab was somewhat simple
the multis were ok.. overall id give this piece a 6/10.. nice short drop.. keep em comming.
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