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Slowness Of Time
IP: EC18 012D
it VERY short... im at work and i cant wait to get off so i keyed a short verse
Why does time move slower, when you're waiting for something to happen Like when your rappin, ur anxious, anticipating the crowd to start clappin Your fingers start snappin, tryin' not to think about the wait You try to concentrate and relate, but it seems that half speed for eternity is your fate You look for something to do, sing, read, or play with a ball You tell yourself you wont look, but find your eyes gazing up the wall But not at the wall itself, but the little circle that controlls the time The light hitting it makes it shine, and again it reminds you, of the slowness of time |
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IP: EC18 012D
i guess this is more of a poem... can someone move it??
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IP: 1859 6918
hate when shit gets slept on ...anything..
i liked the short piece.....the first couple a lines were the best ones in my opinion...tight how u wrote this while waiting to get outta work...good concept...would go great with longer verses... dont sleep on this please http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84172 |
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IP: CF58 3674
ZZZzzzzZZZzzZzZzz you people sleep
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Aint Nobody Iller Than Me
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IP: 7BBC 5E47
It was a good piece and I liked the concept. I can't get too indepth because it was too short to show your full potential. Anyways, it was good.
Return the favor: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=86569 |
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
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IP: 763B ECE4
yo this peice was short as you said but it had meaning and it was on topic all the way thru it reminds me of how i feel at work as well.. i just hate it when times against me.. especially at work.. i felt the peice all the way through the vocab was somewhat simple
the multis were ok.. overall id give this piece a 6/10.. nice short drop.. keep em comming. |
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