Dez


She sat at the bar, stole my breathe from the very instant i saw her
all of these guys are ugly, i dunno if i can take this place much longer
she looks empty, but i had more than enough love in my heart to fill her up
what is that creature looking at? ill tease em, walk by & his arm ill touch
shes approaching me! my god, maybe the tales were true, looks dont matter!
ill flirt with him and then ditch him in front of everbody, imagine the laughter
dont mess this up Daniel, for you a woman like this is once in a lifetime
by his eyes he thinks im serious, me attracted to him? hes out of his mind!
praise god, this could be it, Lord give me your wisdom to guide my dialect
"Hey, hows it goin? I think youre cute, wanna go outside and get some fresh?
"Uh...y--y-yeah..excuse my stuttering Miss, im not accustomed to your beauty"
"thats not surprising, for you see, you simply arnt as good as me"




Setback and startled by her sudden truthfulness, laughter followed me as i exited
I came in with little pride to begin with, that night she chose to shred the rest of it
So grab the people that you love, and dont let looks determine if you go further
Cause often times the most beautiful people tend to be the most ugly, and vice versa




Potent


These concealed views are veiled to view via my complexion
Could have revealed views by making the images objection
You've made a perception of Potent by my sig n presentation
You don't really know conceptions of how I gain my elevation
If it's shown then gestation would've grown within everybody
I've searched within myself but always seen as an understudy
Ruddy judgements..Swallow your eyes so you'll see inside me
Blow my brains on tissue paper so you see what i strive to be
Real raw thoughts are shown lyrically..Not by actions or look
What ever the rumours!!Images are a contraption to be shook
You don't look into the sea and not wonder what lyes beneath
Even the most calmest can shine and make you grit your teeth
Try and Seek for feelings instead of what you could be feeling
Don't just take the front cover cuz that'd be just bad stealing
But appealing is good!! Just appeal against judgments made
For correct indepth answers instead of how their features laid
Geez Creepers.
.What I can say could be worse than Marylin Masosns face
Whoops!! That judgement didn't have a single mental trace

Potent...You Never Fail To Amaze Me...Beautiful Verse, which was well done and just Nicely executed. Dez...Your Storytelling was phenomenal, It Kept Me intrigued and it made me feel exactly what your point of view was telling. Nice using Both points of view.

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why thank you friend. more feedback is appreciated.

well potent that was very good again
good useage of words and got my attention throughout,
props on another well written verse.....

dez good beginner caught my attention from the start
i thought u were gonna go off and write how he comes back
and eats her alive or something..but nonetheless....dope.


props to both now dez go peep my piece getting slept on.

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Me N Bribe are still the only ones who replied...this should get more feedback.

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This was a great collabo.... good story telling.... kept me interested... put me in your shoes.... good shit...