I feel lost and alone and I'm in need of guidance,
Am I the only one left or am i just engulfed in silence,
The entire fuckin planet was taken over wit devistatin violence,
There aint even a soul wit wich i can form an alliance,
I'm tryin to live and im dyin to give anything to stop this,
I could go for a Joint and some chick dancin there topless,
My entire life flashes by my eyes they shoulda legalized Rap,
Its the only thing can keep us busy and you faggets dint even realize that,
But I got it under control mother nature cant handle me,
God Decided specific survivors he dint do it randomly,
Too bad for you won't be able to get money suckin cock,
I dont even need to read the fuckin clock,
I don't keep you reading this for boring facts,
Just know i cant even comfortably take a morning crap,
No more cops ... Couldnt get caught for murder if the sky was pouring rats,

I dunno this was just a quick drop experimenting wit a topic I came wit earlier... Let me know what you think. thanks.
[]Deace

Yo anyone gone give me some feedback?

Somebody give me some Feedback please... I wanna know what yall think bout this.

you need to elavate, but you can see you have potential, just need to think things through more, if you elavted your vocab it may help, or be more destrictive..but all in all good read keep it up peace

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