Fortune for sixteen, then Pot1ent sixteen

A somber mood will conquer feuds as the screen will pitch eratic eyes
Do our leaders really think battle fields careen with diplomatic ties?
Man-to-man, hand-to-hand, combatants diminish hoards of colonies
When a gun rests on my temple, I'm not pondering British foreign policies
So expodite and correct the plights on the beach of hectic fights
& bring forth the ease of compromise for the onset of each effective night
Let us not rejoice in life's choice of strife in a forum dubbed with hate
Whilst presidential hopefuls use it to enhance the decorum of debate
Deflectin' convicts & acceptin' conflict we fashion the mystic, dead decrees. .
which fill ignorant heads with weaponry of nationalistic integrity
We're pained, accepting visions - my mind's deranged but yet divisioned
When "war" becomes cliché it's about time to change its definition
Commence the movement against the ruthless; start defining the brutes
Strap on thinking helmets, breast-plates and start shining your boots
Feeble and pummeled we see through the tumult - regretful and dillusioned
The chapter has evolved; educate yourselves and accept the resoutions
He flips over helmets of the died soliders then Hels-Met
His enemy looked quite freindly & clothes felt like velvet
But while in war he saw them looking like barbed wire
He fed from sad energy instead of being starved & tired
He was barred to retire, but looking at all the dead bodys
Made him more tired while tons of trails led to lead bodys
It was foggy, but he saw a life times worth of memorys
He'd forgotten his family & felt like birth was at a cemetry
Sudden negative energy was budding with scaring leaves
So to ever turn a new page would make it hard to breath
Started to believe that all these men had died with pride
Tentetive tears trickled into the bloodshed when he cried
Which brung alive the atmosphere of the fighting & death
This was his piece of mind that was now reciting the best

very graphis several discriptive lines from beining to end and some were very qoutable i couldnt really see a differnece in style and thought this weel composed and entertaining
maybe a hook would help,,,,,,

up. .

Hit this & I'll hit yours no doubt

upped 'fore self closes it. . Look how awesome this new system is! Replies galore!