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Old 10-31-03, 07:34 AM   #1
Edicius
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SS: In front of u...

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In front of you..

.:Its in front of you:.
The continously search of tryin to find answers,
makes me do things,normally never woulnd't do,
Equalisation of complex nightmares encountered,
but often the solution,funny as it is,is in front of u.


.:Why is it so hard:.
Its real tense and immensely rewarding, when u recieve,
what u, in your heart so.. pure & perfectly, had bein givin.
Or is their no more than,just impressive death animations,
stuck on my blurry daily visions of this so called livin'.

Maybe i shudnt try so hard givin up to expectations,
just look into my future, face forward stop lookin back!.
But still i remain with a feelin of slightly disappointments..
Waitin frustratingly,on that change,that one tru come-back..

The struggles i tryed to conquer remains oftenly un-rewarded,
and the damaged sources,to bad as it is arent vastly improving.
The rapidly disappearing, of exposing aspects of my expression,
only the final results suprisely just keep on coming disregarded.


.:But now..is it changing?:.
At first thought that it was unavoidably to replace,
the unchanging pain.. that was buildin up.. inside...
What would made me feel significantly better than i feld before?
So i tryed to look in front of me, instead of tryin to hide..
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Old 10-31-03, 08:09 AM   #2
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thought this was a tight drop, very nice use of vocab, and i liked ya structure.............

"The continously search of tryin to find answers,
makes me do things,normally never woulnd't do,
Equalisation of complex nightmares encountered,
but often the solution,funny as it is,is in front of u"

^^thought these lines were ill as fuck,....on the whole a good drop,....liked it.......peace!
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Old 10-31-03, 09:51 AM   #3
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this was a good piece,
felt a bit like a poetry piece, maybe it was the rhymescheme or structure,
vocab was hot,
i like the way you broke it down into 3 parts,it helps with the topic,
nice structutre,
different rhymescheme but it works,like i said it sorta makes it feel like a poetry piece,
overall i enjoyed readin it, keep it up

can you check out my empty casket piece
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Old 10-31-03, 10:07 AM   #4
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Give me a welcome to RapBattles people, I'm more into doing songs and such, but I thought I'd see what the online talent in battle forums was like, and while I'm at it, get better at battling.
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