Replied to- Wordperfect, Masta C, and MC Synical

Does death take you into another world
Or does it just transer guys into girls
Vise versa, crazy but it'sa hard question
That people take for granted not a blesson

I've questioned death plenty of times through out my youth
Striving to become to my full potential an fit in a certine group
Restorted dreams an lack of blood making me feel unorthidox
From lack of oxygen to my lungs creatin a dam of air stocks
Choking preparing to vanish as if i was never even created
A child born into the mist soon to be elavated or evaperated
Stocking bliss, to counter attack my question of what death is
Is it a thurst that never quenches that lingers in'a mutant fizz
Father was never there mother tryed to support the beast
Of her son going beyond her capibilities an angel set in the east
Crying at night scared of what may happen to her precious thug
Who's determind to find deaths answer or find love for a slug
Frustration and preperation clashing together lezbians n straights
Realistic angels who were sent to guide people into lords fate
A path with pebbles im'a soldier with no shoes an it hurts
Lingering thoughts of how to get there suicide seems to work
If i die dont cry cause I will soon find my answer in the rest
Of my demies, graveyards are full of treasure chests
For they no the answer of reincarnation of jesus an god
Maybe are thoughts are wrong maybe we go beyond
Who's to tell the exodus of life when we dont understand
Blood in my veins leakin out my eyes to create a mortal man
Invasion of instincs focusing me on the upper hand
Nobody knows what happens after death so watch yaself bleed
Until your day in the casket be thankful for the air you breath

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Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
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This was a good read. .It was mediocre. .It would have been better if the lines flowed better. .like matching up the sylables better. .There wasnt really any quotables. .yet no wack lines. .I hope you get the flow sorted bro. .

Pz

alright i'll work on that man..an thankd for the input

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The Weathers Art
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My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

uppen

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

UPPEN!!!...damn

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

I thought this was a good piece...it was a good read as stated before....your vocab was nicely done....flow was off a bit though, but still a good read none the less...structured it fine i thought...you ended it pretty well i thought....overall it was a good piece...keep at it..and keep dropping.