S.DoT.KiddZ
fgee
24 bars



stimulate seduction-iminent thrusten-
leading to a moment of eruption-
burnen in the flame of passion consumption-
leads to combustion.
lets not even start there-
cause there is where it ends...
here is how it begins-
a fair glair,alluring into indolgince-
to be glutonous in lovers sin.
turn the lights dim-
this is the moment between her and him.
imagine her beautiful elegeants-
matched by wit and intellegence-
the complete package your heart's in suspence.
dressed in her garments-
undressed when your eyes gaze upon it-
adressed her with odes and sonnets.
no comment can be made-
if this were a battle between her and his mind...
mind to his heart....
he's slayed- and blind in love with her from the start.

.......the love........
from her eyes, he sees the reflection of better skies-
for so long a broken hearted angel cried-
cause he felt accursed to be denied-
while his insides felt so dry-
her kiss was the sweet bliss-for solong missed-
a breath of life,no rewind.......its a sweet wine
drunk in her body and mind combine.
each time your lips press-your loves confessed-
when it ends depressed for until the next time
your affection must be repressed.
give her your love and lust-lust and trust-
trust and passion=passion and your hearts fashion.
fashion to your dedication-dedication to the manifistation-
manifistation with no deletion-
of anything but a fair chanmce to be allured into completion.
the temtation is a cruel tease-
to please...
her knowing at that moment it would be with ease.
.................but try something different.......
she feels your breath-you feel her touch-
she is seduced none the less-then by your clutch-
this is the beauty not the uglyness-
of making a bitch out of your potential princess.

damn this was ill,nice twist at tha end i honestly didnt see that coming, nice wordplay, tight imagery, tight rhyme scheme, tight story, stayed on point through out tha piece,all in all this piece was ill. keep droppin tha hotness.~!~

thank you is was piece inspired by S.DoT.KiddZ and a rhyme written by hime alos on this site.please read and critique cause i felt his work is worth being noticed.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...?threadid=89725

pretty nice piece...seemed more like a poem in the begining but then I started feelin the flavor....the ending was dope as hell...lol making a bitch out your potential princess...dope shit overall..now I gotta go hump a pillow or something...

no I'm not serious about humping the pillow either lol

peace

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yeah that shit was nice,
your a true poet
and i really like your vocb in there, it was hot

First of, ..y u sayin i never impress u ?...as feed back?...i didnt get it...lol^^

This had a nice concept, ..and it was well executed, ..nice read..

U never seem to suprise me...lmao...u get me?...

I didnt get urs ..lol^

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Fuck you

on point, kept m readin' till the end, good imagination an wordplay demonstracted in this peice... jus as much as anything else you dropped... but dam, if I was writin'' shit a dope as you I'd be copy writin' m rhymes before postin' em'... jus a thought...

ps, saw that pic of u, that jumper you bust is heavy...
keep rockin' the "fashion"

word does it agian...
nice drop... you had an awkward rhyme scheme but it seemed
to work perfectly for this... heres my fav. part...

"she feels your breath-you feel her touch-
she is seduced none the less-then by your clutch-
this is the beauty not the uglyness-
of making a bitch out of your potential princess."

lmao... very nice ending... that shit cracked me up...
very nice... when we gon' hit up for another collab... just pm me.
~AshY~

thank you this was done cause fgee wanted to see if i was capable of more then battle rap i hope no one was dissapointed in this read

UPPIN

i have to say this was another ill as fuck drop, you just keep getting better and better, as usual your vocab was good, your structure, flow infact all of it, "ya hear me"....lol.....peace

This Was A Nice
Word Perfect
You Got Sum Real Tight
Flow With The Vocab
Underated In My View
Its Really Good Drop
Overall Nice.. But
Diverse Styles Kinda
Shut Down The Feel
Of It

Hit That Up
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php? s=df717aad39a3291363db547484fe5b2d&threadid=90113

damn pop maybe you can elp me with my battles