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Old 11-11-03, 07:52 AM   #1
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Ur gone... but really still there

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I wrote this poem after my father past away 2 days ago in a car accident.
He meant a lot to me, therefor I wrote this to read out on his funeral... I'm not really sure about it though... but tell me what ya think bout it. Thanks in advance.


It's hard enough to convince myself that you’re really gone.
Hate the feeling that I'm all-alone,… but your life lives on.
Tell me why you had to go... Cause nowadays I'm going blind.
Trying not to cry while I'm reading these lines.
But you... you were a sweet deception, always on your feet
cared about others even if they were cheats.
lately, I've been praying for you to come back to my life
Cried soo much, their wasn’t a reason to whipe my eyes.
Just listening to your voice got me insane, it was hysterical
Repeating to the lord …." Please God, Give me a miracle"
But God took the best of me,
he took my only spark
Now i sit here while im wondering why it’s so dark
I lay myself on my bed... as I close my eyes
An appearance of you, took me by surprise
Sitting right beside me,… reality it seems
woke up the next day, …should of knew it was a dream
Emotional, I got.. as tears were dripping down my cheek
So disappointed that I could barley even speak.
But then I understood, that it was you standing next to my bed
So happy to see you again, yet so many tears I have shed
You took me in your arms, ensured me you were doing fine
Told me you’d be waiting for me, keepin a spot in line
Those words and your warm embrace brought me such relief
Taught me to stand strong and to keep my belief
Today, I walk the path of life alone but knowing you’re still there
Cuz after all, every single minute and every laughter… with you I share


* Rest In Peace *
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Old 11-11-03, 08:42 AM   #2
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it'll be alright. We go trhough life and I can relate to you having someone taken from your life so swiftly. This was all emotion and nothing else matters. It was heart felt and felt where it's made to be felt, the heart. Keep your head up. He may no be with you physically, but will always live on in your memories, heart and soul. Much Respect JT
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Old 11-11-03, 09:11 AM   #3
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Great poem split. You put your heart and soul into this poem. Im really sorry to hear about your father. I know how it is to lose someone close to you very suddenly. No matter what happens, you have to keep a cool head about this or it will drive you into depression. I have gone through this already. Its not fun. Your father will always be with you in your heart and mind. Dont ever forget that. Keep dropin split. Look forward to reading more from you.

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Old 11-11-03, 10:50 AM   #4
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^^ thanks to you both
I appreciate the comments and the advice... I take it to the heart
thanks

uppin once again
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Old 11-11-03, 11:23 AM   #5
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i guess really its not the poem that matters, you didnt write this to get publicity and people saying, 'man, you dope.' i'm guessing you wrote this poem to come to terms with the tradegy that has just happened, i know what its like, a friend of mine got ran over and docters feared for his life, he's now partially paralysed and theres things in life now that he'll never be ablse to accomplish. Your probably feeling that his life was stolen short of his time, but always remember, he's gone to a better place, and he'll still be loving you in heaven. Keep ya head up and however hard it gets, never give up.
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Old 11-11-03, 11:26 AM   #6
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^^^thank you so much baby gurl
your words were really not take for granted and you're more than right... thanks for the support!

I hope ur friend will be able to enjoy the little things in life in his own way.
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Old 11-11-03, 08:23 PM   #7
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You certainly depicted your anguish in a ravaging manner. Even with the flaws they came through well. That's what happens with such pieces. Which are personal to the writer. And written in a certain way.

Nothing left to say.

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Old 11-11-03, 09:20 PM   #8
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Sorry about ur dad,Im sure u can pull through it.This poem reflects alotta pain ur feelin over this loss not just another page out ya rhymebook.Lines like:

-Cried soo much, their wasn’t a reason to whipe my eyes.-
-But God took the best of me,
he took my only spark
Now i sit here while im wondering why it’s so dark -

really deep and heartfelt.Best wishes to u and ya fam,Stay ^
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Old 11-11-03, 10:40 PM   #9
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great poem i am sorry to hear about ur dad i know it is hard to lose someone you love. but just keep you head up high. your poem had a personal touch. i think it is great that you take such a hard thing to go through and turn it into such a geat poem.
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Old 11-12-03, 01:17 PM   #10
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^^thanks so much to the people above
i take every word to the heart

uppin again
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