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Old 11-11-03, 01:20 PM   #1
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Arrow 12 Line Keystyle

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It's the frustrations and complications that ruin men's reputations
They set high expectations but have not the patience nor motivation
Got the confirmation or oblegations to give up on a tough situation
That's the reason there's fluctuations and mentally low limitations
Their qualifications for an occupation is slim cuz they on probation
The hood is the location so they're free of violations and regulations
Absolutley no persuasion or aspiration resultin in no determination
Causin a vibration of the nation's foundation weaknin its implications
Explanations of confrontations equal confusions, grave yard donations
No exaggeration, it's what is known as the creation of our generation
There's a variation between assasinations and illegal medications
My calculation is that without modifications we'll be the next extinction
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Old 11-11-03, 01:44 PM   #2
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Can I get some feedback on this. Keep in mind it was a keystyle so it aint perfection. Uppin!
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Old 11-11-03, 02:02 PM   #3
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I liked this peice. Really good for a keystyle. The vocab and flow is well executed but structure could be improved. That's bout all that ruined this peice.
Good peice.
Overall 7/10
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Old 11-11-03, 02:14 PM   #4
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I didn't really like the set one word rhyme in this, thier wasn't no multis, but the flow was very solid throughout, for a keystyle this was very good
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Old 11-11-03, 02:41 PM   #5
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ay that was a pretty decent keystyle homie, i liked it. keep it up dawg. PEACE.

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