One time I woke up, ta this guy hittin me with a hammer...
He was bashin my head in, mumblin some kind of yammer.
Feelin my brians ooze, down the side of my face...
And not even worrying, that my blood's all over tha place.
Cuz hes about ta be surprised, yo, shittin his pants...
When he stops his bashin, my corpse gonna get up and dance.
Then it's gonna chase him, and tackle him in da street...
Snap his head back harshly, twist and repeat.
Then it's gonna drag him, lay his dome on the curb...
Stomp till it open's up and spills the brains of this herb.
After eating his brain, cuz that's what zombie's do...
The undead will live again...and with a healed head too.




Open Mic's I've Peeped...
Deva/Rising Through The Ranks
Snakeyes/Laying a Smackdown
Funn/What I think of RB

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Short piece, odd topic but ehhhh, it was ok. .
major flaws was the flow, but more internals and multi's would solve that, tighten it up and really add you your pieces if you worked more into your pieces. Imagery was decent in this, id of like to see more character build up or plot line at the beginning, but yewah, from whats there this wasnt bad.


Shows potential.

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Thanks Cam...

Much appreciated.

Good ta see the name again.

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