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09-22-03, 10:53 AM | #1 | ||||||
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I was thinking one day and Then I wrote this. This is for every woman out there. I would appreciate it if i got some more feed back on this. It means a lot to me. Thanks all and enjoy.
A woman is a person to marvel at, Such beauty, inside and out, More precious than any stone, Worth more than anything in this world, Simply put…………..Priceless…….. And to be with a woman is a great privilege, That I take, with the utmost respect and passion, When I say she is mine, I correct myself, She isn’t mine, a woman is not property, She has a life, a soul, and a heart, She has a personality and emotions, She can never be owned or controlled, Her life is her own freewill, She makes her decisions and sets her own course, Sails in a new direction when her feelings change, She is her own boss, her means of succeeding in life, I cherish her with all my heart and soul, She is a woman, and underneath much much more……….. I speak this true to every girl who’s been hurt, When times get tough I ask to see one thing, For you to keep your head high and walk proud, This valley may be deep but you are strong, You are a woman and I see what you have to offer, I see your true qualities and not just your body, Your eyes glistening and your smile bright, You are a woman and a princess to me.. Last edited by Smooth JT : 11-17-03 at 09:05 AM. |
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09-22-03, 04:33 PM | #2 | |||||||
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hey this seems to have some what the same message hidden in it as my newest one that i posted. the simple message that women arent just about beauty that some have, they are alot more, they have beautiful ppl inside too. this was written simple and to the point, its nice to see this from another sexs view, which is about the same as mine, but i am female so i know that we are real ppl too. nicely put lots of love ~Tera~ DONT HATE
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09-22-03, 10:05 PM | #3 | ||||||
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you inspired me and i kinda had it on my head and needed to get out. Only some ppl relize that women are people too. I see to much stuff happen and to many girls hurt cuz of some horny ass guy just wantin ass. thanks for your reply, appreciate it peace
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09-23-03, 12:23 PM | #4 | ||||||
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Yeah that was a really touching peice, its good to know that all men aren't bastards, thanks JT for being one of the nice ones. The poem itself had a lot of meaning, i liked the 'women aren't possesions' bit, that was real nicely put.
Ladies keep your headz up! peace and love people plz peep my shit, its called 'Broken Dreams' |
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09-23-03, 12:30 PM | #5 | ||||||
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thank you, it means a lot to me when i get responses. Like this topic this is my personal feeling. When i heer response from women it helps me get more into a mood well i can either expand and or just leave the way i write. Thank you again Dee
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09-23-03, 12:32 PM | #6 | ||||||
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its ok JT, hey check your messages! i like your shit son, keep this up!
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09-23-03, 06:53 PM | #7 | |||||||
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that was dope...the way you brought that across was great, you said something that a lot of people don t have the balls to say i find...always runnin up thats my bitch thats my bitch...lol...but yo that was great...i think all the girls should read that i feel that piece wud inspire almsot every girl in this site peace dawg an major props
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09-23-03, 08:20 PM | #8 | ||||
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Ok Nice topic you have choosen...
Women are far way to dissrespected these days, and they need men like yourself to inspire them with scripts like this... My fav line was.. "And to be with a woman is a great privilege, That I take, with the utmost respect and passion, When I say she is mine, I correct myself, She isn t mine, a woman is not property," Into disect... "She isn t mine, a woman is not property," ^ I Believe a women is God's property...not ours...So well put.. Nice poem...my only critque it lacked a little comeplxity but what the heck nice piece... Laters |
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09-23-03, 09:21 PM | #9 | ||||||
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Through all my personal experiences I have found this out for myself. Every lady who has ever been hurt deserves a man that will respect them and like them for there personality. Unfortunatly this world is still focused on physical beauty. I am myself and i'll never change to make a girl like me. If i'm not good enough 4 them so let it be, at times its great to be free. Able to write from the heart. Thanks all for replyin. Member it's all love peace
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09-25-03, 08:11 PM | #10 | ||||||
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Well you can always save it and post it later, when you have less than 2 posts on front page. But it's all good, a one off like...
This had a simple and solid truth to it. Recurring and unrelenting. And of course, i feel what you said. Women are too often treated as objects of sorts. Er, dunno what else to say... ...resp... |
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09-26-03, 02:01 AM | #11 | ||||||
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i feel you on the topic and a way to get in good with the ladies!!!........i like your style and respect your work because i know for a fact free word is not an easy task.........this is a wonderful drop because the content is there......while your reading your eyes don't really SEE the words so much as FEEL the meaning.....great drop.....but really you could have just waited until your post got pushed down to the next page....just a thought......great poem though......
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09-26-03, 07:28 AM | #12 | ||||||
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very nice piece JT, it kinda brought me 2 tears :\
i love the vibe this poem has, the concept is much needed, im really glad u wrote this, it has amazin insight.. mayb now guys can see that females r more then wha they preceive the flow is nice as fuck, i love the whole poem, the structure works well, its very well written, the description of how a women truly is.. is really lovely, great poem.. killin message, im really feelin the emotion uve displayed also |
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09-26-03, 09:29 AM | #13 | ||||||
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Thanks for all the replys. I get kinda impatient bout things and feel in need to get them out like a.s.a.p. I express myself and be true because of the lessons I learn in life. What I've learned from personal experiences has helped me greatly. Again thank you all very much for your replys. Keep uppin this for me. peace
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09-26-03, 10:06 AM | #14 | ||||||
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I have a lot of respect for any man who can look at a woman as a strong individual, some one who can and some times will be alone and doesn't need a man to belong to... I think the ownership line got me the most, or the way you said that women are capable of sailing our own corse, it reminded me of a beautiful ship sailing away from all the other ones, being it's self. I dunno I guess I kinda imagined the crew's people as being her emotions, maybe I read too much into a line that didn't seem to have that much significance in the poem as far as being elaborated on, but it was what I took away from a wonderfully written and classy peice. A while back Synikill wrote a peice, "The soul of a black woman" That peice was like this, but it was a recipe more or less. Kinda reminded me of this peice. There is nothing more attractive and sensual than a man that knows a woman is her own person and can respect that. Well written, much respect. Peace
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09-27-03, 07:06 PM | #15 | ||||
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I hink this was good but, it can be better. There are ways to sya things with out saying it right out know what I mean. But don't get me wrong I do like it and I love the concept
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