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Old 11-14-03, 09:48 PM   #1
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Dirt.

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...7649#post907649
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...7653#post907653
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...7659#post907659

this is a Topical battle verse. I tried to focus more on metaphors then much else, trying to bring a point to the reader.

Dirt.
Yes dirt.
It doesn't sound like much, when your hear it at this time
Knowing that its the second most common thing you'll find
Next to the water...which on the ocean floor you find dirt
From which food grows, and for which man has to work
Dirt...That without it, The planet wouldn't be held together
There wouldn't be nothing to pave pavement,falling forever
And the planets safety, what peacemakers really yearn
Knowing from dust we came, and right into the dirt we return
You take it for granted, step on it, and not even try to realize
Dirt is the foundation for Earth, more than meets the eyes
Dirt, fertile or not, its the springing waters for civilization
Yet we pollute it, and don't even try take it to consideration
Dirt What we take granted everyday, yet is so essential
Without it, Then there is no need for life or it's credentials
We have to be thankful, like a flower grows,civ. springs
Trees that have roots inplanted on which birds sing
Wer'e taking it for granted, since it holds things together
But what would we be without it? Civilized People? Never
Dirt...Be thankful you are here, because Your earths Cause
Dirt...We think its so impure, but it has not one of our Flaws
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Old 11-15-03, 08:16 AM   #2
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This was a very unique read. I liked your flow, but most of all i liked how this was set up, the way you described dirt and how we take it fr granted and such was sick that was very cool keep it up pz
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Old 11-15-03, 08:35 AM   #3
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Gracias
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Old 11-15-03, 09:48 AM   #4
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I like how you took something nobody sees and put into perspective through rhyme...this type of rap is what would change cash and cars to a stand up and move-ment
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Old 11-15-03, 10:46 AM   #5
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Thanks, uppin for more comments.
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Old 11-15-03, 12:26 PM   #6
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lol thats dope, never thought i would see a topic on dirt i probabley wouldnt listen to it if it was a audio id be like WTF. but it was intresting read, it inspired me to write about hair!

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hair your every where even my ass
hair i smell you on the girl in my class
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Old 11-15-03, 11:52 PM   #7
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^WoW...
oh and BTW Up
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Old 11-16-03, 12:19 AM   #8
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Pretty tight drop, bringin' life to something noone cares about .. Got alot of creativity in this drop .. Keep up the good work ..
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Old 11-16-03, 12:21 AM   #9
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^Thanks for the In depth review. Oh Please, don't hurt your fingers.
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Old 11-16-03, 10:31 AM   #10
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Old 11-17-03, 03:55 PM   #11
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Honestly...Up
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Old 11-17-03, 04:01 PM   #12
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It's good to see rappers who rap on "REAL" shit. Liked it alot, it shows how imagnative you are, and how you abstract something around you into thoughts on paper.. Peace Keep droppin'...
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Old 11-17-03, 06:19 PM   #13
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this was real good, i like the way it makes you think about dirt and how important it is..lol. anyway a real unique topic even though you didnt choose the topic you wrote a good piece and stayed on topic well. nice flow, just overall dope.

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Old 11-19-03, 04:07 PM   #14
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Like...totally up.
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Old 11-19-03, 04:26 PM   #15
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Take it from a person who has had poetry published: this is good stuff. I happen to think metaphors are important. Not a lot of rappers do that. It's good to be different.
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