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Corrupted Visions: Would You Still Love Me ?
IP: E38C 4580
Nah, Nah, Nah. . Baby This Is Serious Shit. . . What If All This Shit. . This House. . The Cars. . The Jewelry. . What If All This Shit Was Gone. . . Would You Still Love Me ?
What If All The Shit I Was Blessed Wit Jus Left Quick? You @ I Both Know We Felt This, But Would Leave Me Helpless? Lead Me To Believe You Won't Deceive If I Lose My Money But See I Know You're Hungry, Don't Play Me For A Dumb G You's My Honey, Yeah Now, But What About In The Long Run If The Law Comes Or If I Absolutely Have No Funds Can I Trust You While I Touch You Now To Not Look Down And Frown Upon Me, Leave Me Lonely, No Longer Stayin Round How This Sound? Cars, Jewelry, Mansion, Pocket Expansion What If The Time Comes When I'm Lackin-- You'd Get Pissed Cause Nuthin Stackin Shit Got Me Wonderin Baby, Crazy I Must Be, Cause I'm Lucky To Have You By My Side, Wait, Imma Star, That's Why You Wanna Fuck Me? I Believe You Love Me, But What Happens When My Star Fades? Are You Like Every Other Chick?, No Pay You Leave Me In A Daze I Jus Wanna Girl Who Loves Me For Me, Not The Dough From My Music So I'm Pressin This Question For Testin To See If You's The Truest [Chorus] What Happens When All This Shit Jus Disappears? For Years You Loved Me, But Now You Don't Know What Direction To Steer Are You All About The Paper Possibilities? Would You Still Love With No Money Willingly? I Need To Know Now See, This Here, Really Boggles My Mind Sometimes You Get The Shine, Fine Dine, And You Say You're Mine But What If You Come Ta Find I Can't Afford What I Used Ta You'd Become The Heart Abuser, Shut Me Out Like A Mornin Rooster You'd Choose Ta Do That Correct? Or Was My Judgment Ignorant I Get A Grudge Sense When Hearin This Chatter Bout Paper's Significance Money Can Only Buy You Happiness That Is Short Lived Four Tenths Of My Life Revolves Around This Shit-- That's For Bills, Now Look How Much The Poor Don't Get Would You Rather Be In Love With Money Or Unconditionally If It's For The Perks, Yes It Hurts, But We Gone Stay Friendly Pay Attent, I Know Ya Likin Ya Wrist Glistenin' But What If All This Shit We Gettin Suddenly Turns Up Missin'? Are You Bailin', High Tailin' It Outta My Life If Shit Don't Balance Will You Leave Me In Malice?. . You Might So If There's No Greenary In Our Scenary Tomarrow--- This Could Be Our Last Goodnight [Chorus] -Formula Last edited by Formula : 11-24-03 at 08:10 PM. |
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IP: E38C 4580
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Auspicious- Don't Call LoCo- Thug Life Peepers- Photographical Proof I Realize This Shit Ain't Near My Best Probly, But Bare With Me. And If The Flow Seems Off, I Guess It's Just To You, Cause It Rolls Right Off My Tongue. . -Formula. |
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IP: 340D 8B8F
I liked this piece....you structured it pretty well i thought...the flow was real nice, didnt really get off at all, stayed on point through out it....You had good multies in it...I was feeling this as i was reading it, it made for a good read...you had good lines in there...i liked how you ended it and your chorus was pretty good as well....overall this was a good piece...keep at it and keep dropping.
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IP: E38C 4580
Uppin. . Leave Links N I'll Reply. I'ma Be Hittin Shows Up Tomar. Afternoon.
-Formula. |
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IP: 81D2 416D
first verse was deff better then the second but still a pretty good lil song here
i take it you got money hehe yah man ino what y amean but moneya nd shit ruined it for me so we thinkin of it in 2 total diff points of veiw but i liked what u did with this a couple quotable lines good drop man return the favor!! |
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IP: 01A3 7C2E
your content was good, and your structure was pretty good.
the multies in your verse seemed somewhat forced though, but your flow was pretty good... your vocab was aight on this peice as well... nice drop dawg... Ima start peepin your shit and watch and help you elevate. ~AshY~ |
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IP: E98D 7B4B
I agree wit A.T. it seemd that some of ur multi's were forced but other then that ur flow was ok I thought that it fell off in a couple points but I dunno maybe I'm juss reading it wrong but structure was ok. wordplay was ok to. but all in all man it was a good drop good content keep elevatin and droppin bro.
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