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Old 11-21-03, 11:03 AM   #1
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Groundhog Syndrome

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anotha day i awake to the same tape/
the city feels like its been raped/
dead and cold, everybody at work comes late/
cant changed dat fate, cuz work sucks so ya gotta relate/
breaking backs for a minimum wage, i rather turn a page/
skip to the end of the day to return to our cage/
think your free in this escapade/
hell nah, we in a stale mate stuck unda a system/
Got da case of da blues cuz i cant find my rythem/
sinister people make my life and yours more deeper/
no rock bottom insight, the abyss gets clearer/
fuck, cant stand up to cuz i feel da heat like de niro/
you in distress, fuck waiting for hero/
progress in my city is close enough to negative zero/
too much shit on my head to eat cheerios/
in stereo i come at the end of the scenerio/
time to sleep cuz thats about the only time i be free/
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Old 11-21-03, 11:08 AM   #2
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Alot of work needs done here. Good topic i must say, but you gotta draw the ppl reading it in, and give it that extra bit of depth.. Keep elevating Peace Holla
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Old 11-21-03, 06:06 PM   #3
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first off i really liked that. i really likes the choice of words.they really gave the song some more meaning. that cherio line was screwed up though. i think you could do good in the future
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Old 11-21-03, 06:31 PM   #4
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you need to work on your message dawg, and work on elevatin
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