peep it bout my girl...ino u guys will think alot of the lines are corny but its allll like inside jokes please believe it!!



[Chorus!][2x]
the walk in your eyes the look in your hug...
the talk in your thighs got me hooked in your love...

[Verse 1!]
we come see..that with you it fills my heart completely...
so baby never leave me been 2 months but i want hughes at the end of edie...
right now im perfect so hows life? great only because we togther now right!!...
compared to them other girls you the best of..your the reason i get up...
feed you food...cant ever see me leaving you..the path to my heart is were u leading to....
my life was collapsing now you hold up my skys...you molded my mind...
to show me the signs...and now you grasped me wit the glow in ya eyes...
my hearts knocked over for hurting..and now its all patched up because of october 13th...
i was lost and trapped with satin..and now god sent me a gift THE GREAT ONE!...
your not right you gotta be kidding me..your the "ROSE"s "LIBERTY"...
you my only fish in the sea.and now because of you the misery is history...
eat you alive just to be SUGAHIGH!!..i love you i couldnt lie, with you i shouldnt die...
you walking now my back is cracking..cheerish inside jokes full of flabergasm...
times with you i store it..cant ignore it..i remeber are first kiss especially the moments before it!...
you completly complete me..8 years or so want my son to see me with edie...
i cant think how i would stay without you..just look how i describe my days without you...

[Chorus!] [2x]

[Verse 2!]
did i mention your the best kid..chilling i couldnt put every second in a sentence...
can you see my tention...heart locked well you got the key for entrance...
assume the position..its for you im living...and pefect?? are future children...
move and glisten...i cant even explain what my lips is kissing...
edible arts..but now your E.ating D.evils I.n T.errible H.earts...
give you your "Liberty" hand you your "Rose"..now marritable thoughts...
i wanna be with you thats why i hurry..i dont wanna LOSE YOU thats why i worry...
laying togther on your bed stare at you till ya eyes is burried...
cant measure my love with a ruler..i dont wanna be with out you thats why your a LOSE-HER!!!!...
weird relationship but believe it i love yo eye...just laugh..when i tickle yo thigh...
you got me LIFTED the greatest feeling..make it are song cause suga suga how ya get SO FLY!!...
tears plunder like the storm is low...dont lie baby we both kno your cornieo!!...[haha]
you only happen once cause the great must come..we just express are love by making fun...
LOOK you just break in a hug..and now your just stealing my heart and taking my love....
chilling in ya room with you on the singin...now im addicted to you chewing on my fingers...
you kno i worry my mind is stupid on the thinking...now love cupids on the linking...
now i leave on this note.."Jeff loves Edie 4 lyfe!!" believe it and quote!!...

YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS...and yall thought it was done hell no baby i lobe this girl!!!!


j' adore tu..dont understand it?? baby..i love you...ebonics...
why why must i worry..ino it nothings wrong jeff..SLEEP ON IT!!...
baby are love burns buildings we gone need the fire men squad...
head lay on the side of your heart...11/15 i just straight died in your arms...
edie you just make me wanna last with the way you look at life...
maybe even shook at times..BEHAVE!! right?!?![haha] hide away the crooked nights...
other girls ehhh they something but really ONLY YOU must mean more...
i had nothing i must see more..now i actually have someone to succeed for!!...
see the tickling just a game if i hurt you kno i didnt mean it!!!...;]
feelings baby you fucking dig deep and patch up the hidden and seemless...
THIS KIDS HAPPY!!!..come on i agree miss matching socks is nicer!!...;]
knock ya fibers...come on we both kno that its a rock not a spider!!!...
you kno and ino that when we would speak and walk its deep...
ino that i cant have memories like this especially are talks in sleep...
think you cheating you gotta be kidding...thats not what im living...
i'd rather think of are convos in are sleep i got it now...ITS YOUR LIVER!!...
it might appear to you just think..i wouldnt wanna see you spend this with a different dude...
we have so many insiders..good feel right near to you...your just the wifey material...
open hearts dont shut your chest...i almost gave up i was on a rusted quest...
i would never cut you next...only thing i need to see form you is I LOVE YOU JEFF!!!!!!!...

Jeff: idk why but i felt sooooooooo much happier when i was talkin to you
Edie: ooooo i kno wut ya mean..trust me..i was still kinda pissed yesterday but i felt alot better w/u

put togther all my writtens and it wouldnt come close to showing my love...
it means nothing u kno the flowing and such..soft skin ;] u known for your touch...
love.. mean it see it know it..GOD damn lets do some of them jesus arobics!!!!...[haha]
see men it opens..feed us with poems..take breath away maybe a step meet us in motion...
you've been missing all along now lose you please i try not to i wanna die in your stars!!!
got ya eyes on my scars...lie on my heart...and you carry my sky in your arms!!!!!...
we gone rock this one!...baby are times togther isnt wasting time the clocks missing...
now its forever are spot glistens...you put me in a new world..dont ever stop kissing...
enter seas...you mention me? baby i realized we MEANT TO BE!!...from god....you was sent to me...

!->E.ven D.eath I.ncourages T.he H.eart<-!
!->R.ight O.n S.erious E.motions<-!
!->L.ove I.s B.ringin E.veryone R.ight T.o Y.ou<-!
!->S.omeone A.lways M.akes S.ure O.f N.obodies<-!

Baby i love you!!!!..no one breaks us not even that bitch..edie you kno who!!!

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if you couldnt tell the last part spells her name edith rose liberty samson please blieve it my wifey!!

Links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=94116
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=94138
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=94153

^^damn kid....

i can tell u put alot of emotoin and time ..in this..and reminds me of ME..wen i really get into wat im writing..so i like that therre...

ur flow was good....structure..good....wordplay...WHICH I LOOK AT ...WAS IMPRESSIVE....

OVERALL...LIKE UR WORDPLAY....IMPRESSIVE

very long..but worth the read....

I EXPECIALLY LIKED UR CLOSER..

!->E.ven D.eath I.ncourages T.he H.eart<-!
!->R.ight O.n S.erious E.motions<-!
!->L.ove I.s B.ringin E.veryone R.ight T.o Y.ou<-!
!->S.omeone A.lways M.akes S.ure O.f N.obodies<-!


^^SHOWS ME HARD WORK...

PROPZ KID

KEEP WRITIN MAN...*IMPRESSED*

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THE RESTRICTED WUN HAS ROZE 2 CONQUER.....AGAIN!


I'M BACK!!!

thanks uppin

this was aight.....


too me i couldnt really catch the flow....but dont judge it cuz audio is all that matters..but on text it was hard....

i didnt really catch any lines that stood out....it kinda got me feeling low and shit (lol) so i was getting restless with the piece...but its aight if u pouring out serious heart shit....
but good stay on the topic and focus....just work on not making me feel like shit ....haha...


*goes to room and starts writing*


*starts crying*



"fuckin FAT"

lmao at game haha

thanks uppin this

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