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my version of the played concept...with a few twists...this is one fat meta so please give me constructive criticism ...

My mind escapes any vision even distant parallax///
spit wit precision..incisions deteriorate most ancient aritfacts///
Mc's fossilized..forced to lie..that my raps against them arent suitable///
yet suited in blue..some cats claim to bang when they rap from cubicles///
with played games..not me i disperse the new..Mc's yes ive served a few///
i've blessed this site(sight), but still see couple cats tryna curse my views///
lurkin in the pitch white, tryna pounce in the face of lightnin///
oblivious to my knowledge of the clear path that lied behind them///
learned their tendencies, learned the fact that they aint even enemies///
learned thier ways of walk only cuz they learned to respect me///
wantin to attack from behing..not knowin they overlapped my footsteps///
I'll barracade their skillz everytime i retract a movement///
i glance back at my student, tryna hide with strings dangled///
froze for a bit, continued on 10 steps to leave his strings strangled///
chokin every one of my words out his mouth this kid dissolved down south///
my last pupil to convo with satan and let em know what im all about///
thinkin im back home..but my physical form just conquered an inner demon///
satan's losin hold..every pad i rage on enemies is an evil releasin///
i'da been free by now..but every crumpled page puts a stall to the scheme of the sequence///
just need a few to go, waitin for next dude to ingint my fuse to blow///
satan wants me back, so he fucks my life hopin he can bruise my flow///
instead i stare back..reflecting past faces of my fallen underclass-men///
they died from grasped pens..knowin full well what was comin at them///
and thats when..i found i couldnt stand the sight of my enemies///
so i smashed the mirror..grabbed a pen and recharged my energy///


criticize now...fat metaphorical session...peace ...and no weak wack critiques please...break it down.....late