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In my eyes
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This can be translated many ways..
I stand on the doorway watching you sink No tears in my eyes not even a blink You gave me a place in your heart But i use it and tear it apart Granted me with your trust I exploit it and blow it away like the dust Blinded by the fire in my eyes your trust for me grows higher Slandered by my words you wait for a day that’s brighter You can no longer stand as i witness the down fall of your soul I gaze into your eyes and watch you fall You faintly whisper i thought we were friends What have i done to deserve this revenge Me you will never be able to see And for that you'll never be free |
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Nice, I liked this.
When i first read it, i was thinking about a relationship, where youre doing the person wrong intentionally. But then my whole thoughts flipped. I started thinking about the corruption of society, and how there arent many TRUE people out there. I saw you realixing the pain that you was causing ut no caring, just using this person as a step stool to help you get higher. But i also saw it as a person that's very dependant on you, and very clingy, expecting you to take care of everything, and that path making them weaker, causing them to sink lower, and you just watch it and it doesnt affect you b/c you didnt like being the supporter, and having all the responsibilities on your plate, and they realize, but it's to late........ now that i htink about it, i can interpert this like 20 more different ways, but fortunately i'm not, lol, but this was a real nice piece, it made me think, and not many pieces do that. I enjoyed it. keep it up
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Thanks for the words ladysage. Jyeh your right so far and theres many more ways.
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This is wonderful... the brutal honesty, and lack of mercy.... I love it. You are right, it could be percieved in many ways this piece, to many different equations... But for me, it was that blatant 'Im fucking you over' attitude that you have written that I love. No remorse, nothing lol Its so refreshing to see!
Love it... Great write.
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Glad people are understanding and feeling this. Thanks for the words Tourniquet.
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i liked this piece this could be precieved in many ways. i feel this was about a relationship and how u dont care what they think you are gonna get back at them . great read.
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Why is this section so dead all of a sudden
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Bump... bump
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last time im bumpin this izm
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