Topic Death..

The End of life something people threaten to do..
Heart-Attacks, seisures, you might get lucky wit a breakthrough..
When life gets complicated and older you dont know what can turn out..
Could've been a barfight.. u took 3 swings and missed you already have a strikeout..
Little kids wonder what DEATH does and all about it..
Could've been drugs, alcohol, or maybe Smoking Commit..
Affect your lungs, stops your breathing which equals Death..
Your last words have been spoken, you have took your final Breath..
Could've been set-up a planned kill on the dot..
Could've been a stabbing, or you could've been shot--..
--In the head and watched blood ooze squirm out quickly..
Your life shortning as you sit there as you dont know what your life is going to end up as..
Light comes to you as brightness awaits.. Its God Love, what else does he have?..
Its death that people that are afraid to experience..
..Could've been froze to death.. Under 0 substance..


My other thread got closed or sumthing.. cant find it.. well, tell me what ya think

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this was a decent drop...the topic was fallowed well and you seemed to have an idea for how to write originally with new ideas on death and shit....but some of the lines didnt flow well...and some of it just didnt rhyme at all...you discriptions of the different ways of dying could've been more vivid...but for a new kid this wasn't too bad

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...7124#post947124

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95318

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...7134#post947134
Spike Sanders
The Rehab
Auspicious (or something like that)

flow was a little off

vocab coulda been better

maybe try using multies and metaphores

not a bad drop though

i liked it it was a constructive drop and interesting to read