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in bold-TAG
regular font-Double-0 seven


You see an Asian can't believe he's blazin on the mic
Asian rappers? Hell naw ya think that can't be right
Rappins fo blacks with some whites thrown in the mix
Theres no Asian rappers that are puttin out big hits
But I'm here to politely inform ya of this false theory
When you see how I spit rhymes, you'll be seein clearly
My flows are like virgins, cause ya know they come tight
Your flows fuckin blow more than a stick a dynamite
I drop hits more than a bar of soap ina gay prison
Your intranced by my style all ya can do is listen
For all da hatas that judge by the color of my skin
Copy save this verse so you can read it again
After this yall can't do nothin but respect what I say
The day I let ya bring me down, I'll lead the KKK
Fuck the racists who hate and call me a chinc, gook, or uthas
Cause I'm Korean proud of it back of me Mutha Fucka



like T.A.G said, you gotta throw a white boy in the mix,
the goverment, think they can solve problems in the mist,
im an english, white boy, suffer racism when i rap,
even though i got skill, spit ryhmes, till my lungs collapse,
pride is at stake, but still pricks wanna bring up race,
laughed at in the face, first time i rapped, it was great,
i felt the blood rushing inside, and my skin went all hot,
then the comment, felt sickly like the first time smokin pot,
but racial issuses, all because of the history of the world,
like we'er our anchestors in modern day, they aint sure,
changin they minds, as much as biters switch up lines,
not accepting life, as a whole, instead they livin old times,
personally i aint the product of my own races actions,
im my own person, turn on me like changin radio stations,
i know the history of my but let the past, settle like dust,
you can think false thoughts, the world almost built on trust.



aiight
when you reply, drop a link to an open mic, or poem an i'll give some feedback.


aiight


peace

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This was a good topic but I've seen better from both....especially you double-0 seven. That might be coz it was a difficult topic to write on, I dont know.

TAG....your verse was pretty simple and I wasnt feelin the flow a lot even tho you had goods points.

"After this yall can't do nothin but respect what I say
The day I let ya bring me down, I'll lead the KKK"

^^This was your best bar in my opinion....it showed that your detirmined not to be beaten. Overall you need to add more words that rhyme in your lines and be little more creative. The prison soap line was a bit corny.

double-0 seven....I know you can do better. Your structure was fine but again, like TAG's it seemed like a lot of it was forced and didnt come easily into your head.

"personally i aint the product of my own races actions,
im my own person, turn on me like changin radio stations,"

^^That was your best line. What you both needed to do was spend a little more time thinkin bout your verse's. I dunno how long you spent on this but I know ya's can do better.

Overall - 7/10

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HARRY R.I.P
1940 - 2002

In Respect

well seeming i wrote the verse tonight, and i was workin on the crew anthem,

7/10 is a ill rating

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My flows are like virgins, cause ya know they come tight
PLAYED LINE POP.
OTHER THEN THAT SIMPLE YET CATCHY AND THAT IS GOOD FOR THIS BUT IT WILL NEED MORE COMPLEXITY AS YOU POST MORE TRACKS EITHER WAY IT WAS A GTOOD START BUT I KNOW SEVERAL ASIANS THAT CAN RIP PRETTY GOOD AT LEAST FLOW CONSITANT...OVER ALL GOOD VERSE WORTH CHECKIN MORE WORK FROM YOU.

007-YOU TARGETED THE TOPIC ALOT BETTER IN YOUR VERSE BY USING A CONCIOUS ASPECT UNLIKE TAG WHO USED BASIC BATTLE FORMAT.IT WAS REFLECTENT OF MORE EMOTION.
SOME LINES DIDNT FLOW AS WELL BUT GOT THE POINT ACROSS WHICH IS JUST AS GOOD AS BAD. OVER ALL YOU HAD THE BETTER GRASP ON TOPIC IN MY OPINION BUT THE COLLAB LACKED COMPLEXITY.THE IDEAS WERE GOOD AND GIVEN MORE EFFORT I THINK IT WOULD OF CAME BETTER.

STILL A GOOD COLLAB AND ATTEMPT AND WORTH UPPIN......7/10

Yo, I though' this was a grea' piece...a good collab, makez me wanna read mo of both ya shi'...good stuff, but sometimes I was jus' not feelin' it, an' some of the ryhmez r sorta tired...but good overall, can' wait ta read more...

8/10

I don' have an open mic goin yet, but me an' E-Lyrical r collab goin' up soon...check it...thx