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Old 12-06-03, 06:05 PM   #1
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anotha keystyle check it

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Ayo my antics of tatics , consist of spittin rabid flaming automatics.\\\
My myriads of rhyme designs help keep the mind divine.\\\
When i open my mouth poison dart hit the nerves on the spine.\\\
It take one millonth of a second for the pain to reach the mind.\\\
Granting time.\\\
For my enzymes to create another rhyme.\\\
If ya cant understand it , hire a linguist to translate the lyrics.\\\
Im superior to this monologe of perverbial spirits.\\\
I spit wit drastic masses of plasmic gases\\\
when it hits the skull it penetrateS the skin like sulfuric acids.\\\
Direct like an arrow , shething diffirent bone layers tills it reaches the craniums marrow.\\\
The darkness consumes you like the blackness of a crow.\\\
Entering the brains nerves , burns like the hot metal from a gun just blasted , put the shaft against the neck, pull away and watch the skin strech like elastic.\\\
Scars lasting longer than floors glued wit mastic.\\\
Tragic when lyrics reach critical masses.\\\
Hot flashes obtained to drain, emcees who decree the game.\\\
Weakness is a dieses , and its the brain i blame.\\\
Ive obtained enough knowledge to rock false opretives.\\\
Wit difinitives as im spittin prophesis strait out the book of leviticus.\\\
Ive mastered this , and i hurt way beyond Napalm from Nam.\\\
Lyrically gifted , the instant im spittin niggas run like chickens.\\\
Hardcorous Maximus is spittin till he's spitless , and i have infinite liqiuds equiped in my glands kid.\\\
So im neva quitin.\\\
Keep shittin , like cryptospermidium was induced into my intestine.\\\
My mic blesses , ripping asshole fleshes, causing masive messes.\\\
Ending any chance for emcees to combat wit this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!. . HARDONE....
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Old 12-06-03, 10:21 PM   #2
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This was alright i thought....structure needs work though, some of your lines were stretched out there then a few were really short, just try to keep them around the same length....flow was alright, could have used some more multies in this though...but keep at it.
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Old 12-07-03, 02:25 AM   #3
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The begging was tight, it got my attention, keep writtin' and I'm sure that audio would sound nice. Keep it up!
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Old 12-07-03, 02:38 AM   #4
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nice work man...i enjoyed it...nice vocab too...you came tight
with the multies...it was difficult to understand but it had a
great flow which made it a good drop...the structure could
use a little help but otha then that...its tight...props...
peace

ps. check out my thread wen i post it up in a few...thanx
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