My Replies:Kredit and Formula- [Insert catchy title here]/Kredit
Ghosts in my Mirror/King of Thieves
Short one/ Sky High

I go on and on, From dusk to dawn
My mind doesn't stop, sleep, I always yawn
It races, up and down the halls of my conscience pacing
In silence, the stress of the day I'm facing
Quit counting sheep, with black sleep reality I'm replacing
Doctor classifies me as an insomniac, lack of sleep creating a maniac
A Freudian struggle with my mind getting frantic, Gotta calm down can't panic
-Radio Feedback- Constant mind static, my head is like an overstuffed attic
A candle with a forever lit wick, like it was put to fire with a magical bic
Have 2 lv this post, Try to travel to the neverland coast
Goodnight sweet dreams,wonder what my sleeplessness means

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Let God speak for the underground Psalm 49 16-17
16 Do not be overawed when a man grows rich when the splendor of his house increases
17 For he will take no thing with him when he dies, his splendor will not descend with him
18Though while he lived he counted himself blessed - and men praise you when you prosper-
19 He will join the generation of his fathers, who will never see the light of life

20 A man who has riches without understanding is like the beasts that perish

STARTED OFF WITH A NICE FLOW BUT IT FELL HALF WAY THRU..YOU PICKED IT BACK UP....BUT!....VOCAB OK......LIKED THE TOPIC......A BIT SHORT......BUT I SEE POTENTIAL HERE...KEEP AT IT...AIGHT.....pZ.......

ehh i wasnt really feeling this.. for one it was mad short.... and the rhyming was mad simple...you gotta lot of work to do but so does everybody starting out..which i hope u are jsut starting out or something but um yeah ...check out the tips people dropped in the threads on the site..teaches u alot bout text'n

Yeah this was ok....your structure needs a little work though, try making the lines around the same length so its structure well cause you had some long ones and some short ones...vocab in this was ok, like deva said...but this was ok, just work on the things,..keep at it.

Thanx ya'll I wrote this quick in class didn't have time to think it thru alot thanx for the replies ima try to fix the mistakes pz and luv

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Let God speak for the underground Psalm 49 16-17
16 Do not be overawed when a man grows rich when the splendor of his house increases
17 For he will take no thing with him when he dies, his splendor will not descend with him
18Though while he lived he counted himself blessed - and men praise you when you prosper-
19 He will join the generation of his fathers, who will never see the light of life

20 A man who has riches without understanding is like the beasts that perish