See how, the Juveniles' Wild, Paper is my Style, but..
Sad kids Flip My Concept, just to get a nasty Paper Cut. .
A steez thats worth fearing, I'm the one you're hearing here today..
And with an Eery Feeling, blast my rhymes inside your Hearing Aid. .
But really kids, I'm serious.. My talent's quite mysterious..
Where blaring hits and pencil tips, will Make My Point with Periods. .
Quite nice, played and rocked, sickness often shown by quotes..
Me not dope.. a paradox.. and on the side; a Pair Of Boats. .
Rhyme time I'm gifted, fact is kids are endangered..
I'm Original and Different -- so the Odds are always in my favor. .
Spit fast see, my raps please, even all my blanks are pulling pranks..
Rhyme in slang.. and put emcees at Ease.. like an Empty Gas Tank. .
Write vividly and lividly, the fact B, I want respect..
Images my words paint.. make the Mirror stop to Reflect. .
Facts in.. this action is just a Fraction of my talent..
So if you really want the whole.. it's in the middle of my Album.

I Enter Respritories Like Elirs Of Vics Vapor Rub. .
Breakin Down Immune Systems N Turnin Torn Ligaments To Amputated Stubs.
Creating Massive, Impassive Intergalatic Acids. .
With Distractin Drastic Tatics That Are Dramatic To The Lymphatic. .
Nodes, I Spit Electrodes To Put Fags In Self-Destruct mode. .
You Implode, While My Tongue Explodes. .
Your Lines Left To Corrode. .
Your Lines Are Just My Rhymes Re-Wrote, Why You Provoke?
When You Know, I'm Always Spittin N Bringing Deporative Cancers
Runnin Rampant, Only Answer Is For You N Ya Clique To Scamper
I Use This Microphone As A Gateway For Past And Present Indulgance. .
I Expose Clits N Throw Shit To Any Bastard Not Holding Dope Spits
I'm Takin Over like Jahova Or Medeval Dynasties. .
Hearin These Put You At Ease N Refresh Your State Of Being. .
Dumb Fucka, My Lyrical Stampeding You're Not Heeding. .
So I Inflict A Deadly Hypnosis With Multipleclerosis N Leave You Bleeding

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6882#post946882
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6890#post946890
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6906#post946906

Come on, I replied to other pieces, reply to mine. .

This Shit Is Dope. . Why Do Wack Pieces Get Feedback? . . Lord Only Knows.

-Formula.

Come On. . Can't We Get Jus One Reply?. . It's Highly Frustrating When The Only Replies Are From Me N Kredit To Up This Piece For Feed.

-Formula.

fuckin ill lyrical.........very good piece,both of you are super ill poetic........tha songs reminds me of Big Pun and Black Thought on "Super Lyrical"........only problem i find is that i needed a dictionary to read that piece......9/10 good rapping

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(RB's "ill" MCs)


Otherwise known as Artikulate

^ Thanks duke. . Finally got some feedback. =)

The wordplay on the first edged the second verse.. The second verse had some nice metas with very nice wordplay.. The whole collabo was really good.. This is the sort of thing which I think is legendry.. Whether anyone else does.. Screw them, Wordplay and metaphors seem highly underated here.. This piece was oozing with it.. The flow on the first piece edged the second aswell.. While both kept on point.. Multis are the only thing that could improve this..

Pz.

Word Potent. . Thanks For The Feed Man. . You're Serious Bout This Drop Bein Legendary? If So. . Big Up's For That.

Just To Clear This Up For Further Feedback. . First Verse Is Kredit. . Second Verse is Formula. .

-Formula.

This was good I think it would be better on the open audio mix. you got a better flow for the vocals instead of the reading but you have a lot of skill with your rhymes good lookin man. pz and love

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Let God speak for the underground Psalm 49 16-17
16 Do not be overawed when a man grows rich when the splendor of his house increases
17 For he will take no thing with him when he dies, his splendor will not descend with him
18Though while he lived he counted himself blessed - and men praise you when you prosper-
19 He will join the generation of his fathers, who will never see the light of life

20 A man who has riches without understanding is like the beasts that perish

1ST VERSE FEEL SHORT ON THE BEGINING BUT CAUGHT UP HE NEEEDED TO BE MORE CONSTRUCTIVE IN HIS IDEAS AND DELIVERY...PLUS SOME PUNCHES WERE REAL SHORT ONLY HALF ASS THE SET UP LINES SEAMED BETTER.OVER ALL 6 /10

SECOND VERSE
VERY IMPRESSIVE INTRO AND VOCAB DELIVERY WAS CONCEISE AS WELL....SOME VOCAB MAKES IT A COMPLEX READ.....
ALSO THE PUNCHES THOUGH WELL WRITTEN IN WORDPLAY ALSO FELL A LITTLE SHORT IN THE DEPTH OF MEANING.....BUT CONTENT COVERED YOU WELL. 8/10

BOTHE TOGEATHER MAKES THIS 7/10

^lmao. . alright.

You all suck.

I replied to this at RM, yep. = )

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