~"Alone In The Dark"~

Cold In The Corner, My Feelings Dying In The Silence, Noise Suffocating, Falling Short, Before My Ears
Tears Falling, Flooding Near My Toes, My Heart Is Full To Bursting, All I Ever Wanted Was To Blend Amongst My Peers
I See Them, Smiling, Laughing, As They Scowl At My Demise, Hit Close To My Soul With Every Taunt,
Dreams Have Faded, Mind Is Jaded, Visions Shattered By Neglect, Hurtful Words Reveal My Skeletan, Looking Gaunt.

For Every Insult That They Throw At Me, Their Ammunition Painful, Deadly, My Defences Seem, Inevitably, To Fail,
They Won't Listen To my Pleading, My Crys they Find Misleading, Trapped In A Corner, They Have Me Bolted In My Jail,
Too Afraid To Spread My Broken Wings, To Humiliated To Fly, To Break Free Of The Chains Drove In The Ground,
Does Anybody See Me? A Ghostly Shadow in The Corner? Fantasies Of Heaven, But To Hell She's Homeward Bound.

Very nice i like it alot

great flow, i got tripped up at some points but it was still great

keep it up

the flow was kinda off, but all in all the emotion and energy wa great had a lot of outstanding lines and some great vocab keep it up...can ye peep my soft focus poem thanks

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

This was some great shit hunni. Emotion and everything was felt deep. Everything was on track and I liked it. much respect to you babe, JT

I know exactly what your talking about in this peice. Seriously. I can understand it... well... I can understand it as much as I can from my own perspective. Unless you're really good at elaborations, aint no one can truly understand it from your perspective except you.

So I can take what I can from this peice in my own way.

I can't really say I can relate though. Everyone notices me. I never go without being noticed. Of course, that's usually because I'm an embarrassing spectacle. And I would not be at all suprised if that skeleton remark was in reference to you having anorexia or something. And I can't relate to anorexia either. I've always been to lazy to have the will to go without eating.

But yeah...

For Every Insult That They Throw At Me, Their Ammunition Painful, Deadly, My Defences Seem, Inevitably, To Fail,
They Won't Listen To my Pleading, My Crys they Find Misleading, Trapped In A Corner, They Have Me Bolted In My Jail,

I know exactly what that's like though.

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.