YO MIC,
MICRAPHONE CHECKER,
GRANDSLAMS WIT UR GIRLFRIEND MAN UPPER DECKER,
DONT CARE IF IM A HOME WRECKER,
DRILLIN UR GIRL LIKE A CORDLESS BLACKNDECKER,
SHE'S UNDER THE TABLE---
PLAYIN FOOTSIES WIT MY PECKER,
MY DICK SO HARD--
A RECKTER--SET,
LETS MAKE A BET,
FUCK HER LIKE THIS COUNTRY FUCKS AH VIETNAM VET,
UR GETTIN NERVOUS--
STARTIN TO SWEAT,
DROPPIN LYRICAL BOMBS ON THIS INTERNET,
COULD NEVER MATCH ME BAR FOR BAR,
ED MCMAN ONLY GAVE UR FLOW------ ONE STAR,
LETS TAKE A SEC --TO SEE WHERE YOU ARE,
UR RYHMES WACK,
LUNGS FUCKIN BLACK
IN COVERED WIT TAR,
DONT GET MAD YOU GETTIN DISSED BY A WHITE GUY----
JUST BETTA THEN YOU ARE,
UR STYLES DEAD---
BETTA SAVE IT IN A PICKLE JAR,
THE BAD PART IS -----
I FUCKIN PITY,
GROWN MAN--
STILL SUCKIN ON MAMMAS TITY,
DUDES AS FAKE AS----DIDDY RUNS THE CITY,
IM 2 WITY,
2 ------ 2
QUIK 2 RESPOND,
AH BIGGER PIMP THEN DON DA MAGIC WAND,
BIGGEST FISH UP IN THIS BATTLE POND,
DOUBLE OG LIKE JAMES FUCKIN BOND,
WHATS UP?
WHERES ALL UR COMEBACKS?
"YOU AINT GOT NONE"
OK ILL STOP,
IM ALMOST DONE,
YOU GOT KNOCKED OUT----
IN ROUND FUCKIN 1,
CHILLIN IN THE CALI SUN,
1 MORE THING BEFORE IM RUN,
MARK MOTHERFUCKER WIT MY 12-GAUGE SHOTGUN!!!!!!!

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THE GREAT WHITE MIRACLE

For One...You need to leave 3 lines or 3 names or this will get close/deleted...and For Two i dont think your suppose to make polls in here...

But this needs work though....structure wise needs the most, make the lines longer and around the same length....flow was ok, but add some multies to help that out and internals as well....just work on elevating..and you will get there...keep at it.

umm your structure and flow and multies need alot of help but you'll defenetly will get better soon i gues