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Old 12-07-03, 09:03 AM   #1
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[Diligent.]

IP: 261B 829D

How can you ever be Diligent
If you can never Deal A Gent?
Well. . .
My source tops everything like Ketchup
I'm Like one legged whores Sex Struck
Next Up.. Is Hip Hop
I no doubt. Top Tips
Becuase I'm Tip Top
Sock Hits Like Calvin
IN-Klein to my album
I'm A-Row-Sing Like Dramatic Arguements
A-Stat-Tick Bars due.. Like Marked Electric
Pot Writes Angle to get Sharp Connective
Larks Rejected
I Run This Like Paula Radcliff..
Crossed With Mauraice Green
. . . . . . A Bawler To Have This
Going Further In The Shortest
Never Did-Saw Words Sor-Did
I've Wore Bibs..
So no one downs my front
Does one no how to stunt?
I'm there Like Evil Kenevil.
Seemingly Effortless Like Sewing Machines
I'm Twister The Way I'm Blowing My Scene
Yet keeping on the ground
Your reaping potent sound
Like its grim.. Mics My Whim
Then Flip it. But. .Whims Might Scim
Skills develop so the Winds Writing
I'm as happy as Can Be
You see what a Bee Can. Do
When you see Pot Plan View
So. . . . . Do as you Do
Don't Do what they Do
Do your Do Like Shockwave
I'm Like Iraqees I RockRave
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Old 12-07-03, 09:18 AM   #2
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Old 12-07-03, 10:08 AM   #3
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nice flow..original structure which worked well...

You had dope wordplay here..nice Calvin Klein line...good vocab as well..played well with such short lines.....

I like your original structre compared to this..but it was good...keep the shit up.
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Old 12-07-03, 12:09 PM   #4
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Old 12-07-03, 12:42 PM   #5
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The flow was nice, you should try another topic or make your lines longer. It was a good concept, I liked your use of words. Keep writtin!
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