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The taste of tears colored crimson, it’s an everlasting story
Memories triggered from lashes, the scenes flash before me
The threads of truth have been torn, the music violently faded
The smiles and laughter now unworn the lies are silently stated
Hidden behind the tied confinements, the yelling transcends
Induced abuse inside the times spent, the fighting can’t end
Tragic glances romanced, their heard words were unspoken
Static chances won’t last, each crafted promise went broken
I’m just a child growing up, yet each second spent is a threat
The mind of mine rewinds the times to pray one day I forget

hope you can understand it...
here's a hint: domestic violence...

something to think about...

peACE

threads i replied too:
"daddys back"
"just a thought"
"nitemares"
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this post is dumb...my comp is gay...
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hey im feelin this joint as first i was a little confused on what you were talking about i do admit that but the little hint made it all better to me the imagery was nice i had to read it twice.. Nice asz job...and nice battle record lol ..

thanks for the feedback, much appreciation. this piece is one of my unique ones. but I felt I had to get it off my mind. seeing as how I grew up with it. it’s the first time I actually put it onto paper…
peace

yo i gotta say this peice has realy great vocab nice structure and also the meaning of it was a bit confused but after reading it over i got the idea...

great stuff and hope to read more from you

peace

The layers of seemingly suffocating and unrelenting pain n suffering created quite a dense atmosphere.

The melancholy n what not was there, though the 'true' meaning was hidden. Or at least 'greyed' out. Needing one to get past that to find it. Though it was hard to put thast into full effect when you gave away the jist of what it was about.

It's a sad thing. One that is also quite 'akward', both sociologically and psychologically. This piece seemed to echo that in a way.

Very nice piece, man.

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^thanx peepz. much appreciation. yea i really like this
piece. its one of the few that i write from the heart. but
i was jus really feeling it. so thanx again.
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yo nice drop right here. you have a really nice way with words and you are really great at that.....im not the best poetic analysist so it doesnt matter if i coudlnt get right on the exact thing u were speakin about but i feel like i got the vibe and a vague idea of what you were conveying. nice job. u are really talented.